On Monday, September 16, 2013 6:21:20 PM UTC-7, Smartin wrote: > Since the last round of updates we've had additional feedback from the User > Engagement team, and we'd like to propose some further changes to a broad > audience. > > > > The goal of the proposed changes is to see *if* we can trim the principles to > 118 characters of text without sacrificing meaning, so that Mozilla can > utilize grass roots marketing efforts, such as Twitter (118 characters of > text + shortened url = Twitter 140 character limit). If we can shorten > without changing the meaning, we can utilize social media to compete against > organizations with much larger marketing budgets and communicate directly > with users. This is not to say, in any way, that social media should trump > substance. Rather, it’s an attempt to see if we can do both - keep the > substance and gain the social media presence. > > > > After having worked through the goal and the language with Mitchell, I think > this has been accomplished, and I think she agrees that this is the case. > While the Manifesto was written to Mozillians, we discussed the benefit to > making it more broadly accessible through social media and that the added > crispness and clarity that we hope to achieve by shortening the principles > may also add benefit and is worth discussing. We hope to gather input this > week to allow time to launch a v1.0 in October, as part of Mozilla’s 15th > anniversary year. > > > > For more information about his project, please visit > https://wiki.mozilla.org/Manifesto/1.0_Changes > > > > The changes: > > > > Two principles required additional shortening beyond our initial efforts. > We’d like to focus the discussion on these two to help make sure that the > additional changes conform to the original intent. (Note - the numbers in > parentheses are the character counts, targeted at 118 or less.) > > > > Proposed #6: The Internet depends on interoperability, innovation and > decentralized participation worldwide. (95) > > > > Notes: > > > > Previously approved version: The effectiveness of the Internet as a public > resource depends upon interoperability, innovation and decentralized > participation worldwide. (140) > > > > Alternate revision: As a public resource, the Internet depends on > interoperability, innovation and decentralized participation worldwide. (117) > > > > Original: The effectiveness of the Internet as a public resource depends upon > interoperability (protocols, data formats, content), innovation and > decentralized participation worldwide. (174) > > > > Benefits of Proposed Version: Shortens to focus on the Internet itself, less > complexity in an already complex principle. The Internet is defined as a > public resource in principle #2. > > > > Proposed #9: A balance between commercial involvement and public benefit is > critical to the health of the Internet. (102) > > > > Notes: > > > > Previously approved version: Commercial involvement in the Internet brings > many benefits; a balance between commercial goals and public benefit is > critical. (129) > > > > Alternate revision: A balance between commercial goals and public benefit is > critical and brings many benefits. (92) > > > > Original: Commercial involvement in the development of the Internet brings > many benefits; a balance between commercial goals and public benefit is > critical. (146) > > > > Benefits of Proposed Version: Keeps the original emphasis on the necessity > for commercial involvement, while removing repetitiveness to shorten. The > proposed version is thought to better emphasize commercial involvement. > Public benefit is emphasized a second time in principle #10. > > > > Other changes: > > > > Principle #1 - Replace the dash with a semi-colon. > > Principle # 3 – Replace “individual human beings” with “individuals” > > Principle # 5 – Replace “it” with “online” > > Principle #10 – Replace “Magnifying” with “Increasing” > > > > Proposed Revision as of 09/16/13: > > > > 1. The Internet is integral to modern life: education, communication, > collaboration, business, entertainment and society. (118) > > > > 2. The Internet is a global public resource that must remain open and > accessible. (80) > > > > 3. The Internet should enrich the lives of individuals. (52) > > > > 4. Security and privacy on the Internet are fundamental and can not be > treated as optional. (88) > > > > 5. Individuals must have the ability to shape the Internet and their own > experiences online. (89) > > > > 6. The Internet depends on interoperability, innovation and decentralized > participation worldwide. (95) > > > > 7. Free and open source software promotes the development of the Internet as > a public resource. (93) > > > > 8. Transparent community-based processes promote participation, > accountability and trust. (88) > > > > 9. A balance between commercial involvement and public benefit is critical to > the health of the Internet. (102) > > > > 10. Increasing the public benefit aspects of the Internet is an important > goal worthy of time, attention and commitment. (116) -------------------
Hi all - Thank you for all the feedback. I've consolidated it into the following revised recommendations. I think we are pretty close on agreement for 1-8. I tried to stay with the originals when we could, thus I did not change #8 to add "the Internet" because I felt it still made sense as a standalone without it. Let me know if you strongly disagree, or if you strongly prefer an alternative for #'s 9 and 10, where we had several alternate suggestions. #1 - The Internet is integral to modern life: education, communication, collaboration, business, entertainment and society. #2 - original - The Internet is a global public resource that must remain open and accessible. #3 - original - The Internet should enrich the lives of individual human beings. #4 - Security and privacy on the Internet are fundamental and must not be treated as optional. #5 - Individuals must have the ability to shape the Internet and their own experiences on it. #6 - As a public resource, the Internet depends on interoperability, innovation and decentralized participation worldwide. #7 - original - Free and open source software promotes the development of the Internet as a public resource. #8 - original - Transparent community-based processes promote participation, accountability, and trust. #9 - A balance between commercial profit and public benefit is critical to the development of the Internet. #10 - original - Magnifying the public benefit aspects of the Internet is an important goal, worthy of time, attention and commitment. _______________________________________________ governance mailing list [email protected] https://lists.mozilla.org/listinfo/governance
