On 24/09/13 01:51, Stacy Martin wrote:
> Hi all - Thank you for all the feedback.  I've consolidated it into
> the following revised recommendations.  I think we are pretty close
> on agreement for 1-8.  I tried to stay with the originals when we
> could, thus I did not change #8 to add "the Internet" because I felt
> it still made sense as a standalone without it.  Let me know if you
> strongly disagree, or if you strongly prefer an alternative for #'s 9
> and 10, where we had several alternate suggestions.

Hi Stacy,

I think the current draft is fine to ship as it is; that's not to say
that some of the tweaks suggested in this thread are not worth taking.

> #1 - The Internet is integral to modern life: education,
> communication, collaboration, business, entertainment and society.

I'm happy with this; I think the loss of "as a whole" is acceptable.

I agree we should standardize our comma usage :-)

> #9 - A balance between commercial profit and public benefit is
> critical to the development of the Internet.

I like this too.

Gerv
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