We could preserve the feel of "modern life" by doing something like this:
The Internet has become integral to communication, collaboration,
education, entertainment, business and society as a whole. (124)

I liked the modifier of "modern life" because I think we all know that all
of those things could exist without the internet so the absolute statement
doesn't ring as true as one with a qualifier.


On Tue, Sep 24, 2013 at 10:13 PM, Nicholas Nethercote <
[email protected]> wrote:

> On Mon, Sep 23, 2013 at 10:03 PM, David Flanagan <[email protected]>
> wrote:
> >
> > That's 116 characters--two characters shorter than the current proposal.
> If
> > it was up to me, I'd also re-order the list to go from more general to
> more
> > specific parts of modern life, and take advantage of some  consonance:
> >
> > The Internet is integral to communication, collaboration, education,
> > entertainment, business and society as a whole.
>
> I like it.
>
> Nick
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