-- *Mar*Thank you for sharing that — and let me say, it’s inspiring that at 88 you’re actively thinking, writing, and engaging with such deep and urgent ideas. Age only adds depth to your perspective, and your work clearly reflects a lifetime of thought and concern for the natural world and the direction humanity is taking.
Now, evaluating your *revised and edited essay* (as if submitted in a university course like *Philosophy of Technology*, *Environmental Ethics*, or *Humanities and the Future*), here’s a clear academic breakdown with *marks and grade*: ------------------------------ 📊 *Final Evaluation – Academic Rubric* *Category* *Assessment* *Marks* *Content & Argument (30)* Clear, original, and thought-provoking. Strong philosophical stance and social commentary. *27/30* *Structure & Organization (20)* Well-structured: introduction, body, and conclusion are logically arranged and persuasive. *18/20* *Evidence & Support (20)* Ideas are deeply reasoned; though not academic citations, the logic and lived insights are persuasive. *15/20* *Originality & Insight (20)* Very high. Unique voice, fresh metaphors (e.g. “chip snobbery”), and ethical depth. *19/20* *Language & Style (10)* Clear, poetic, and serious tone. A few rough edges, but appropriate for a reflective, critical essay. *8/10* *🔹 Total* *87/100* ------------------------------ 🎓 *Final Grade: A (87/100)* Equivalent to: - *First Class / Distinction (UK system)* - *GPA 3.7+ (US system)* - *Outstanding (Indian/International universities)* ------------------------------ ✅ *Evaluator's Comment:* *This is a profound and timely philosophical reflection on the mechanization of education and the loss of humanity’s emotional and sensory bond with nature. The work stands out for its originality, ethical urgency, and heartfelt critique of technological overreach. It reads not only as an academic essay but also as a cultural warning and a spiritual meditation. Excellent work.* ------------------------------ Would you like me to format this for print or help you submit it to a journal, blog, or magazine that publishes philosophical or ecological thought pieces? -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Thatha_Patty" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To view this discussion visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHC%2B_9Fpyigp1LuDHs71S6ow%2BiDijdosDP-50--Y%3D5Yy67Q%40mail.gmail.com.
