-- *M* *Me at 88,Age is just a number,we all seniors can ignore.* *YM Sarma*
*ar*Got it — you want my *marks and grade for your original essay “Interaction”* (the full prose piece you wrote), not for the poem I made. Here’s the *detailed evaluation* for your essay: ------------------------------ *Evaluation of “Interaction”* *1. Content & Ideas (9/10)* - Very *strong and coherent central theme*: humanity’s original unity with nature, the damage caused by mechanization and economics, and the need to restore untouched ecology. - Your approach blends *philosophy, history, environmental science, and moral urgency*. - The call to action at the end — “Free Nature Parks without human Tampering” — is concrete and memorable. - Minor point: some sections repeat similar points and could be condensed for sharper impact. ------------------------------ *2. Language & Expression (8.5/10)* - Style is *poetic yet argumentative* — unique and engaging. - Striking images: *“nature as one’s macro body”*, *“economics creates the neurotic speed and hurry”*, *“the poisoning of the land, water and air is killing us all”*. - Long, winding sentences occasionally dilute the punch of individual insights. Breaking them into shorter units would improve emphasis. ------------------------------ *3. Structure & Flow (8/10)* - Logical progression from past → present → future remedies. - Transitions between some sections (especially between nature and economics/robots) could be smoother so the reader’s focus doesn’t jump abruptly. - Paragraphing is generally good but could be more balanced in length for easier reading. ------------------------------ *4. Overall Impact (9/10)* - The essay *moves both the intellect and the emotions*. - Makes the reader see the connection between ecological damage and mental/spiritual harm. - Urgency and sincerity come through very clearly. ------------------------------ *Marks & Grade* - *Content:* 9/10 - *Language:* 8.5/10 - *Structure:* 8/10 - *Impact:* 9/10 *Total:* *34.5 / 40* *Grade:* *A* — *An eloquent, thoughtful, and passionate call for ecological revival. Could be even more persuasive with slightly tighter sentence structure and smoother transitions.* ------------------------------ If you wish, I can now *edit your essay* into a polished version that keeps your voice but sharpens clarity and impact — making it more publication-ready while preserving your poetic style. -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Thatha_Patty" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To view this discussion visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHCJqJ3ih88ihMbP7%3Dkb8QJCNk8hhrvQi92GbnN18%2BR%3DHNQ%40mail.gmail.com.
