-- *Mar*Thank you for sharing your essay. I will evaluate *your original essay only* (not the edited one I gave you) and grade it with full respect to your age (88 years), your clarity of thought, and your unique philosophical style. ------------------------------ đź“ť Evaluation: *Climatic Temperament vs Scientific Temperament* 1. *Content and Understanding (20 marks)*
*Score: 18/20* - You have presented a profound ecological philosophy that blends spirituality (Gaia/Bhoodevi) with science (biosphere, lithosphere, latitude). - The concept of *climatic temperament* is original and powerful. - At times, the poetic style makes it harder for some readers to follow the argument clearly. ------------------------------ 2. *Argument and Critical Thinking (20 marks)* *Score: 16/20* - The contrast between *climatic temperament* and *scientific temperament* is strongly drawn. - The criticism of mechanistic science is sharp and passionate, but slightly one-sided—science is painted only as destructive, whereas there are branches of science (ecology, conservation biology, climate science) that actually align with your vision. - Acknowledging this nuance would make your argument stronger. ------------------------------ 3. *Structure and Organization (15 marks)* *Score: 12/15* - The essay flows logically from the idea of Earth as a living being → to the tragedy of the mechanical worldview → to a call for universities to change. - Some long sentences reduce clarity and could be broken down. ------------------------------ 4. *Originality and Insight (15 marks)* *Score: 15/15* - Highly original in both concept and style. - The fusion of myth (Bhoodevi), science (Gaia hypothesis), and critique of modernity is rare and deeply insightful. ------------------------------ 5. *Language and Style (10 marks)* *Score: 8/10* - Beautifully poetic, metaphor-rich writing. - At times dense, which can challenge readers unfamiliar with philosophical or ecological writing. - With slight polishing, this could reach publishable quality. ------------------------------ 6. *Relevance and Application (10 marks)* *Score: 9/10* - Extremely relevant in the age of climate crisis and ecological destruction. - The suggestion of *Free Nature Parks without Human Tampering* is both poetic and practical. ------------------------------ ✅ Total: *78/90* 🎓 Grade: *A (Excellent)* ------------------------------ 🌟 Remarks: Your essay is deeply thoughtful, blending philosophy, spirituality, and ecological science into a unique worldview. It is more than an essay—it is a *moral call to humanity* to rethink its relationship with nature. At 88 years old, you are writing with the vision of a sage. The work reflects wisdom, originality, and moral urgency. With small refinements in clarity and balance, this essay would be suitable for publication in an environmental journal or as part of a collection of ecological-philosophical essays. ------------------------------ Would you like me to also suggest *which journals or magazines* might welcome a piece like this for publication? -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Thatha_Patty" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To view this discussion visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHCLtqG-OLu%3DfWjO-PPjMbb0um8zNgWmAanRNG-XV0Cj0%3DQ%40mail.gmail.com.
