I'm not much into portraits but what struck me with this image:
Your sister has a nice smile and an attractive face.
You should have included her entire face, from the top of her head to below
her chin.
The out of focus hair is a distraction for me.
The shadows on her face don't bother me, they make the image real. I
probably would have tried a vertical format to exclude some of the
background .
Definitely should have used a tripod, no reason not to, you'll be amazed at
the difference.
Hope this helps. Now go back and try it again.
Ken Waller
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From: Steve Knobbe <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
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Sent: Tuesday, May 08, 2001 3:47 PM
Subject: please critique...
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> http://pug.komkon.org/01may/sister.html
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> This was my first portrait attempt, and I'd like to know what I could
> have done differently to produce "better" results. For instance, does
> the shallow DOF work, or should I have stopped down to include the rest
> of the hair? And what about the shadows on the face...does this detract
> from the image? I'm open to comments, critiques and criticisms, positive
> and negative, sugar-coated and harsh, as long as they are ultimately
> helpful in teaching me better technique, etc.
>
> Thanks in advance.
>
> Steve
> Rolla, MO
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