I have finished my read thru, red/green changes since begin of auth48.
Could you hear that clutch grinding sound as I swapped in neurons not used in 
awhile?
I have read all the emails in the threads too, noting the changes to terms.

On the whole, I am happy with edits.

I found though:

Figure 3 seems askew, the ^v route between S and D is hard to read.
Figure 4 is better, but might also be better aligned.
Figure 7 has skew and some other issues... like this line of ._- under
"Southbound API"
I checked .html and .txt to be sure it wasn't just the red/green markup.
Figure 18... not sure if there is a problem.
Figure 19, definitely a problem.

I think these just need some tweaks to spacing, probably at the beginning of
some lines to move them to the right?

some nits:

>3.7.1.  External Dependencies
>   This specification expects that the main DODAG is operated in RPL
>   Non-Storing Mode to sustain the exchanges with the Root.

Pascal, I think that this might be more than expectation.
I think it MUST be NSM, otherwise the root won't receive the right
path/adjacency information, as storing mode DAOs will summarize everything.
Well, we deal with this in section 7.1, so maybe a forward reference.

4.1 titles "Extending RFC6550", but section 4.1.1 tells about Amendments.
I think 4.1.1 should s/Amend/Extend/g, as the new P bit does not change 6550
behaviour, but rather, extends, it.
Ditto 4.1.2.  Or, 4.1 could be titled "Changes to RFC6550"
4.1.4 correct Amends the rules.
This is really a nit.

section 6.8:

   >When encapsulating the inner packet to place it in the Track, the first
   >header that the ingress appends at the head of the inner packet is an
"appends at the head of the inner packet"
isn't that... prepends?
Maybe just "inserts"?
I don't feel confident that all readers will comprehend this section in the
same way.

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