I have finished my read thru, red/green changes since begin of auth48. Could you hear that clutch grinding sound as I swapped in neurons not used in awhile? I have read all the emails in the threads too, noting the changes to terms.
On the whole, I am happy with edits. I found though: Figure 3 seems askew, the ^v route between S and D is hard to read. Figure 4 is better, but might also be better aligned. Figure 7 has skew and some other issues... like this line of ._- under "Southbound API" I checked .html and .txt to be sure it wasn't just the red/green markup. Figure 18... not sure if there is a problem. Figure 19, definitely a problem. I think these just need some tweaks to spacing, probably at the beginning of some lines to move them to the right? some nits: >3.7.1. External Dependencies > This specification expects that the main DODAG is operated in RPL > Non-Storing Mode to sustain the exchanges with the Root. Pascal, I think that this might be more than expectation. I think it MUST be NSM, otherwise the root won't receive the right path/adjacency information, as storing mode DAOs will summarize everything. Well, we deal with this in section 7.1, so maybe a forward reference. 4.1 titles "Extending RFC6550", but section 4.1.1 tells about Amendments. I think 4.1.1 should s/Amend/Extend/g, as the new P bit does not change 6550 behaviour, but rather, extends, it. Ditto 4.1.2. Or, 4.1 could be titled "Changes to RFC6550" 4.1.4 correct Amends the rules. This is really a nit. section 6.8: >When encapsulating the inner packet to place it in the Track, the first >header that the ingress appends at the head of the inner packet is an "appends at the head of the inner packet" isn't that... prepends? Maybe just "inserts"? I don't feel confident that all readers will comprehend this section in the same way. -- ] Never tell me the odds! | ipv6 mesh networks [ ] Michael Richardson, Sandelman Software Works | IoT architect [ ] [email protected] http://www.sandelman.ca/ | ruby on rails [ -- Michael Richardson <[email protected]> . o O ( IPv6 IøT consulting ) Sandelman Software Works Inc, Ottawa and Worldwide
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