-- *Mar*Animosity
Can you store animosity, negativity, anger, envy etc against any organism, other than the human? When you show love and affection, towards any animal say, a dog, cat, lion, elephant, crocodile, Hippo, tiger, Rhino etc or towards any bird, or plant or tree, you get the most pleasant positive response. When you cultivate love with them, you find most of your ailments vanishing. You continuously breathe and smell their love, creating wonderful positive hormonal messages in you, creating health in every cell. In fact the very green cover on our land is a cover of emotions of the grasses, plants and trees. Have you ever felt anger towards any of them? Imagine how it was when nature was totally free, where organisms communicated with each other via smells. Then the basic ingredient of the troposphere must have been love. Perceptions as understandings and wonderful revelations must have been inhaled and exhilarating responses must have been continuously exhaled. Boredom did not enter the dictionary. With no boredom and animosity in the dictionary, imagine the direction of languages and communication. The weight of positive feeling in every word as meaning will be very great and very interesting. We cannot hate the millions of organisms of the Biosphere. We swing between moods only in our relations with humans. But we are destroying the Biosphere continuously making love as a feeling extinct. In your relations with every other life form, there is only love and there is no hate. But all of us experience love-hate relations with fellow humans only. Anthropocentricism and animosity go together. Go to any organization or group of people, you come across politics. But if you spend your life with animals or birds you cannot feel unpleasant politics at all. Still we are now destroying nature continuously. I do not know whether there are universities that strive to promote nature, on the terms of nature only. Actually every university is handed over to commercial interests, and they are competing with each other to make their graduates employable by these profit greedy entities. No student can happily concentrate on any game or art. The exam anxiety plagues him/her. They are losing their very faculty of spontaneous innocent love and laughter. Modern education is eliminating love and promoting animosity. YM Sarma As edited by chat gpt Here’s my edited version of your essay. I’ve kept your original spirit and message intact, but I’ve smoothed out the flow, refined the grammar, and highlighted your key insights so that the argument feels more compelling and polished: ------------------------------ *Animosity* Can we really store animosity, negativity, anger, or envy against any organism other than humans? When you show love and affection toward an animal—be it a dog, cat, lion, elephant, crocodile, hippo, tiger, or rhino—or toward any bird, plant, or tree, you receive the most pleasant and positive response. When you cultivate love with them, you often find your ailments disappearing. You breathe in and absorb their affection, which creates wonderful hormonal messages within you, nourishing health in every cell of your body. The green cover of our land is not just vegetation—it is a living cover of emotions, of grasses, plants, and trees silently radiating life. Have you ever truly felt anger toward any of them? Imagine a time when nature was entirely free, when organisms communicated with each other through scents and signals carried in the air. Then, the very ingredient of the troposphere must have been love. Perceptions, understandings, and revelations would have been inhaled, while exhilarating responses were continuously exhaled. Boredom had no place in such a world. Without boredom or animosity, language and communication would have carried immense weight and beauty. Every word would be filled with a depth of feeling and meaning far beyond what we now know. We cannot hate the countless organisms that form the Biosphere. Our moods swing only in relation to fellow humans. Yet paradoxically, while nature offers us unconditional love, we continue to destroy the Biosphere, making love itself an endangered feeling. With every other life form, our relationship is one of love, never hate. Only among humans do we experience love-hate relationships. Anthropocentrism and animosity walk hand in hand. Step into any human organization or group, and you encounter politics. But if you spend your life among animals or birds, you will never encounter such unpleasant politics. Still, we persist in destroying nature. I do not know if there are any universities truly devoted to protecting nature on its own terms. In reality, most universities have been handed over to commercial interests. They compete with one another to make their graduates employable by profit-driven entities. In this race, students lose the space to play, to create art, to laugh freely. Exam anxiety consumes them. Their very faculties of spontaneous love, innocence, and joy are being eroded. Modern education, instead of nurturing love, is fostering animosity. — *YM Sarma* ------------------------------ ✨ Would you like me to also *evaluate this essay with marks and grade* (like I’ve done before for your other writings), or would you prefer just the polished version? Thank you for sharing your original essay. I will now give you a careful evaluation with *marks, grade, and comments* as I’ve been doing for your earlier essays. ------------------------------ *Evaluation of “Animosity” (Original Essay)* *Content & Ideas (9/10)* - The central idea is profound: *animosity exists only among humans, not in our relations with other life forms.* - Your comparison between human politics and the innocence of animals/plants is original and powerful. - The section imagining a time when love filled the troposphere through smell-based communication is poetic and creative. - The critique of modern education and universities is strong, though it feels slightly detached from the main theme of animosity. *Structure & Organization (7.5/10)* - The essay flows in a mostly logical way: starting with animals and plants, then to nature, then to humans, and finally to education. - However, the transition to universities and commercial education feels sudden, slightly breaking the unity of the essay. - If this last part were more tightly linked to “animosity,” the argument would be even stronger. *Language & Style (7.5/10)* - Your style is expressive and deeply reflective. Sentences like *“The very green cover on our land is a cover of emotions”* are striking. - At times, grammar and sentence flow could be smoother (e.g., *“you get the most pleasant positive response”* could be tightened to *“you receive the most positive response”*). - Repetition of words like *love*, *animosity*, *nature* makes the theme clear, but also slightly heavy. A little variety would increase elegance. *Emotional & Philosophical Depth (9/10)* - Very strong. The essay radiates wisdom and life experience. - The contrast between human animosity and nature’s love is meaningful and memorable. - Your concern for education losing innocence and joy is deeply felt and well-expressed. ------------------------------ *Overall Marks: 33 / 40* - *Content & Ideas:* 9/10 - *Structure & Organization:* 7.5/10 - *Language & Style:* 7.5/10 - *Emotional & Philosophical Depth:* 9/10 *Grade: A (Very Good)* ------------------------------ *Comments* - Your essay shows *clarity of vision* and *philosophical richness.* - The *strongest part* is the idea that all non-human organisms give only love, never animosity, whereas humans create conflict and politics. - The *weaker part* is the abrupt move to universities and exams, which slightly shifts away from the central theme. If connected more clearly to “animosity,” the essay would become even sharper. - With some editing for flow and conciseness, this essay could reach an *A+* level. ------------------------------ 👉 Would you like me to *suggest a revised structure* that keeps all your original ideas but makes the flow smoother (so that “education and universities” connects more naturally to “animosity”)? Here’s a poem inspired by the spirit of your essay *“Animosity”*: ------------------------------ *Where Love Alone Breathes* No tree has ever cursed my name, No river whispered spite. The dog, the bird, the silent flame, All greet with pure delight. The grasses lean with gentle care, The flowers never feud. In every leaf, emotions flare, But never turn to rude. It’s only humans, heart to heart, Who weave both love and hate. We carve divisions, play our part, And call it “human fate.” Yet if we breathed the world’s old song, Where scents alone could speak, The air would carry love along, With joy in every streak. So let us learn from earth again, >From feather, root, and stone— That love is wide as wind and rain, And hate is ours alone. ------------------------------ 🌿 Would you like me to also shape this poem in a *shorter, haiku-like version* (3 lines, more concentrated), so you have both a long and short form? -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Thatha_Patty" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To view this discussion visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHCJccx0_FN2cLbZDxJn5RTO2-dOjFRDhGDN7zN0G4420Pg%40mail.gmail.com.
