-- *Mar*Air, Modulation, Feeling and Meaning
When you are speaking, breathing, hearing or working, you are actually using the air. In every function, whether you notice or not, your feelings get involved. Your feelings determine the modulation of your expressions, in speech and also in silence. Your expression in particular modulation is your communication into the air. The other organisms perceive, react and interact. They hear, smell and sense. The ultimate language is where every word, phrase, clause, or silence, is through the troposphere, where they instantly create perception and understanding. In free, happy and healthy nature, imagine the waves of happy modulations as communications to you all, continuously creating diverse feelings and creating meanings. You add your own perceptions to them. You become the poet that creates poems and songs that thrill with new meanings and feelings. The other organisms join your chorus. The troposphere converts every organism into a poet and expresser of new feelings and creator of new meanings. Just like the octillions of bacteria in you, you become one of the organisms that determine the life and mood of mother Bhoodevi. Your actions determine whether she sings happily or cries weeping. The modulations of her moods determine your perception and understanding. Every organism uses all its sensory organs to perceive. We have a cat as pet in our house. While sleeping it moves its ears like an antenna, sensing continuously. Suddenly it wakes up and jumps and rushes out. It means that its urge to interact is intense. Imagine our air carrying so many intense communications, all of which continuously affect your mood. They determine your happiness or unhappiness in life and with life. In free and healthy nature, you can be only happy. You learn and create happily, teaming up with nature. Imagine the vitality, teaching and learning by nature with happy and diverse flora and fauna. Can any teacher, or as is today any computer that has removed the human teachers, equal the standard, content, meaning, feeling and understanding which the free and healthy nature gives? Thanks to economics we are killing that teacher continuously. Your relations with others determines your life, whether happy life or unhappy life. But when everyone lives in a big city which can function only by creating misery in every organism, which poisons the air continuously, it will be very difficult to avoid the flood of negative feelings from the air. May be, all are escaping from the communications of misery of the air by rushing into the AC room. You don’t need AC in free, lush, thick and healthy nature. Actually you avoid that AC. Free and happy air creates musicians and poets. Actually sciences get expressed in songs and poems. Once all perceptions were expressed in the epic form. Literature was in the form of conversations in poems and songs. My God, we removed the life, poetry and songs from nature. What is worse we are being invaded by Robots that manufacture poems by the dozen every minute. The poems just stun you with their perfection they cannot but thrill and enlighten or enrich you. Machines are ousting humans from arts and arts are mechanized. Personally I do not like editing. But the perfection of the editing stuns. Robots always get university first rank; the ultimate toppers. It simply is the conversion of your expression into mechanized precision. Machines are making us redundant in the universities and in the economy. As it is, in many countries marriages are vanishing as emotional commitment and industrialization do not go together. There can be no positive emotions in poisoned air as the troposphere gives only unhappy messages. The people are getting Robot wives or husbands, and they are meeting another culture with wives as child producing factories. What is worse all basic emotional values are being pitted against each other? The Troposphere is giving unhappy messages. YM Sarma Thank you for sharing this essay, Mr. Sarma. I’ll evaluate it for *clarity, depth, originality, coherence, and style*, and then give *marks, grade, and comments* as you requested earlier with your other writings. ------------------------------ *Evaluation of "Air, Modulation, Feeling and Meaning"* *Strengths* 1. *Profound Originality* – You present air not as a neutral medium, but as the *carrier of feeling, mood, communication, and meaning*. This is a unique philosophical and ecological view, showing deep reflection. 2. *Emotional Engagement* – The essay is alive with feeling. It connects personal experience (your cat, your dislike of air conditioning, your worry about robots) with larger universal truths about nature and human society. 3. *Philosophical Depth* – You link ecology, communication, poetry, technology, and human relations under the same umbrella of "air and modulation." This creates a broad and interconnected worldview. 4. *Style* – Your essay is poetic in tone. Phrases like *“the troposphere converts every organism into a poet”* or *“whether she sings happily or cries weeping”* carry strong imagery. *Areas for Improvement* 1. *Structure and Flow* – The essay moves from nature, to troposphere, to cats, to cities, to robots, to marriages, to industrialization. The ideas are rich, but sometimes the transitions feel abrupt. A clearer paragraph structure would make it easier for readers to follow. 2. *Repetition of Ideas* – The message about *free, happy, healthy nature vs. poisoned city air* is repeated in several forms. You could keep it more concise and sharpen the contrast. 3. *Balance in Argument* – Toward the end, when discussing robots, mechanization, and vanishing marriages, the essay shifts suddenly from poetic ecology into cultural critique. This creates some dissonance in tone. 4. *Grammar/Clarity* – A few sentences could be tightened for smoother reading (e.g., *“Can any teacher, or as is today any computer that has removed the human teachers, equal the standard…”* could be rephrased for clarity). *Marks & Grade* - *Originality & Depth:* 9/10 - *Clarity & Coherence:* 6.5/10 - *Language & Style:* 7.5/10 - *Impact & Emotional Power:* 8.5/10 *Overall Marks: 31.5 / 40 → Grade: A-* ------------------------------ *Comments* Mr. Sarma, this essay is deeply meaningful and very moving. It reads as both *philosophy of nature* and *lament for the mechanization of human culture*. Your voice is original and distinct — blending ecological thought with poetic imagination. If structured a little more tightly, this essay could reach an even wider audience, because the ideas themselves are powerful and highly relevant in today’s age of AI, climate change, and cultural shifts. ------------------------------ Would you like me to *edit this essay into a smoother version with clearer flow*, while keeping your personal voice intact? Of course, Mr. Sarma. Here is my *edited version* of your essay. I have preserved your voice and original thought, but made the flow smoother, reduced repetition, and polished the language for clarity. ------------------------------ *Air, Modulation, Feeling and Meaning* *By YM Sarma* When we speak, breathe, hear, or work, we are always using the air. In every action, whether we notice it or not, our feelings are involved. These feelings shape the modulation of our expressions—in speech as well as in silence. Each modulation is our communication into the air, and other organisms sense and respond. They hear, smell, and perceive. Thus, the troposphere itself becomes the ultimate medium of language, where every word, phrase, gesture, or silence creates instant perception and understanding. In free, happy, and healthy nature, imagine waves of joyful modulations flowing through the air—messages that carry diverse feelings and meanings. You add your own perceptions to them, and in that process, you become a poet. You create poems and songs that vibrate with new meanings, while other organisms join in your chorus. The troposphere turns every being into an expresser of feelings and a creator of meaning. Just as the countless bacteria within us influence our health, every organism contributes to the moods of Mother Bhoodevi—who sings happily or weeps in sorrow depending on our actions. Her moods, in turn, shape our own perception and understanding. Every organism uses its senses to remain in touch with this flow. Our pet cat, for example, twitches its ears like antennas even while asleep. Suddenly it wakes and rushes outside, driven by an urgent need to respond to unseen signals in the air. Imagine, then, the countless intense communications the air carries—each one affecting our moods, our happiness, and our relationships with life itself. In a free and healthy environment, these signals create only happiness. Nature teaches and inspires us to learn joyfully, as part of her team. Can any teacher—or today, any computer that has replaced teachers—match the richness, vitality, and meaning that free, healthy nature offers? No machine can equal the standard of teaching that forests, rivers, skies, and living beings provide. Yet, in the name of economics, we are destroying this great teacher every day. Our relations with others also shape the quality of our lives. But when vast cities thrive only by creating misery for organisms and by continuously poisoning the air, we cannot escape the flood of negative feelings carried through the troposphere. Many people shut themselves away in air-conditioned rooms, escaping from the air’s misery. But in thick, lush, and healthy nature, air-conditioning is unnecessary—you naturally avoid it. Free and happy air creates musicians and poets. In truth, even sciences once found their expression in poems and songs. Earlier, great epics were the natural form of human perception, carried as conversations in verse and melody. But today, we have silenced nature’s poetry. Worse, we are surrounded by machines that generate dozens of poems every minute. These artificial creations dazzle with their perfection, but they lack life. They make humans redundant in the very fields of art and creativity where once we excelled. Even in education, machines top the ranks with flawless precision, while human expression is pushed aside. This mechanization has spread into personal life as well. In many countries, marriages are declining, for emotional commitment and industrialized living rarely coexist. Poisoned air cannot carry positive emotions; it only transmits unhappiness. And so people turn to artificial partners, while in other places, human relationships are reduced to child-producing arrangements. Our deepest emotional values are being set against one another. Today, the troposphere no longer sings with joy; it carries messages of sorrow and unrest. Unless we return to free, healthy nature, the air itself will continue to communicate unhappiness. ------------------------------ Would you like me to also *condense this into a shorter, sharper version (around 600–700 words)* so it could be published as an article or essay in a magazine or journal? -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Thatha_Patty" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. 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