Package: release-notes
Severity: normal
Tags: patch
Most of the upgrading file is familiar stuff, but this bit needs a
couple of tweaks:
> --- upgrading.dbk.pristine 2015-04-01 19:00:01.309706731 +0100
> +++ upgrading.dbk 2015-04-01 20:49:57.881522911 +0100
> @@ -186,9 +186,9 @@
> <section id="recovery-shell-systemd">
> <title>Debug shell during boot using systemd</title>
> <para>
> - In case the boot fails under systemd, it is possible to obtain a
> + If the boot fails under systemd, it is possible to obtain a
For many English-speakers, "in case X happens, do Y" means "to ensure
X doesn't happen, always do Y".
> debug root shell by changing the kernel command line. If the
> - basic boot succeeds, but some of the services fails to start, it
> + basic boot succeeds, but some services fail to start, it
> may be useful to add <literal>systemd.unit=rescue.target</literal>
> to the kernel parameters.
> </para>
The services that might fail aren't definite (and aren't singular).
--
JBR with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package
--- upgrading.dbk.pristine 2015-04-01 19:00:01.309706731 +0100
+++ upgrading.dbk 2015-04-01 20:49:57.881522911 +0100
@@ -186,9 +186,9 @@
<section id="recovery-shell-systemd">
<title>Debug shell during boot using systemd</title>
<para>
- In case the boot fails under systemd, it is possible to obtain a
+ If the boot fails under systemd, it is possible to obtain a
debug root shell by changing the kernel command line. If the
- basic boot succeeds, but some of the services fails to start, it
+ basic boot succeeds, but some services fail to start, it
may be useful to add <literal>systemd.unit=rescue.target</literal>
to the kernel parameters.
</para>
