Hi El 24/03/15 a las 02:18, Paul Wise escribió: > On Tue, Mar 24, 2015 at 5:50 AM, Laura Arjona Reina wrote: > >> I'm attaching a patch with the new paragraph about HP. > > I found the wording confusing, as it is missing "has provided".
Yes. Fixed in the attached patch. > > I'd also replace "HP hardware donations" with "current HP hardware donations". > > Please also indent the second paragraph as it was before. > Done. I'm attaching a new patch that I hope it's ok. Regards -- Laura Arjona https://wiki.debian.org/LauraArjona
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<partnerlogo "Hewlett-Packard" hp.gif "http://www.hp.com/";>
<partnerdesc>
- <p><a href="http://www.hp.com/";>Hewlett-Packard</a> has provided several
- high-end HPPA, IA-64 and IA-32 servers and workstations to Debian,
- and HP employs several developers to work on Debian HPPA and IA-64
- ports. For information about HP's involvement in the Linux Open Source
+ <p><a href="http://www.hp.com/";>Hewlett-Packard</a> has provided hardware for port development,
+ Debian mirrors, and other Debian services (HP hardware donations are listed in
+ the <a href="https://db.debian.org/machines.cgi";>Debian machines</a> page).
+ For information about HP's involvement in the Linux Open Source
community, see <a href="http://www.hp.com/products1/linux/";>HP Linux</a>.</p>
-
- <p>HP is one of the largest computer companies in the world, and it
- provides a wide range of products and services, such as all kinds of
- PCs, calculators, printers, scanners, plotters, various storage
- products, network servers and equipment, software etc.</p>
+
+ <p>Hewlett-Packard is one of the largest computer companies in the
+ world, providing a wide range of products and services, such as
+ servers, PCs, printers, storage products, network equipment, software,
+ cloud computing solutions, etc.</p>
</partnerdesc>
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