Christian PERRIER wrote:
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> +_Description: Monitoring suite used with NagVis:
> + The NagVis package supports Icinga as well as
> + Nagios, using the check-mk-live broker backend.
I prefer hyphenated "back-end", but since that's the only change I'd
make to the file it isn't worth the effort...
In the package descriptions:
> +Description: visualization addon for Nagios or Icinga
Also "add-on", but again never mind.
> + NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga data, for instance to
> display IT
> + processes like a mail system or a network infrastructure.
Rather pedantically, s/like/such as/. I'm not keen on "IT
processes"... yes, it's a key part of the upstream blurb, but it
sounds as if it's talking about hardware purchase procedures - and
network infrastructure definitely isn't an "IT process". Since one
of the things it does do according to the website is traffic
visualisation, maybe the best answer is:
NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga data, for instance
to display network traffic or IT services such as email.
> + Its key features are:
Fear, surprise, ruthless efficiency... no, no.
> + * Display of single hosts or services;
> + * Display the state of a host dependent on the state of its services
> + ("recognize services");
A bit awkward: in "display of", "display" is a noun, but in "display
the state..." it's a verb. And how does "recognize services" fit in?
Perhaps:
Its key features are:
* Display of single hosts or services;
* Representation of a host dependent on the state of its services;
> + * Visualization of Host- or Servicegroups with one icon;
Why the caps?
* Visualization of complete host- or servicegroups with one icon;
> + * Define Sub-Map icons wich represent a complete NagVis map of
> + hosts/services/groups in one icon (drill down);
s/wich/which/, but the "define" is just a weak attempt to push in the
direction of verbs. And this doesn't communicate what a "Sub-Map
icon" is supposed to be, which rather reduces its impace as a
"feature". Maybe we could simplify it right down to:
* Organization of hosts/services/groups into Sub-Map icons;
> + * Visualization of complete IT Processes using self drawn graphics.
Visualisation of hardware purchase procedures using graphics that draw
themselves (©1948 MC Escher).
* Graphical representation of complete IT systems.
> Package: nagvis-demos
> Architecture: all
> Depends: ${misc:Depends}, nagvis (= ${source:Version})
> +Description: demo Mapgs for NagVis
Take out the surplus letter in "mapgs" and there's plenty of room:
Description: visualization addon for Nagios or Icinga - demo maps
NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga data, for instance
to display network traffic or IT services such as email.
.
Its key features are:
* Display of single hosts or services;
* Representation of a host dependent on the state of its services;
* Visualization of complete host- or servicegroups with one icon;
* Organization of hosts/services/groups into Sub-Map icons;
* Graphical representation of complete IT systems.
.
> + This package provides some demonstration maps.
It's a pity Nagios isn't still called NetSaint - they could have given
this some name connected with holy icons.
--
JBR with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package
diff -ru nagvis-1.6.4.dfsg.1.pristine/debian/control
nagvis-1.6.4.dfsg.1/debian/control
--- nagvis-1.6.4.dfsg.1.pristine/debian/control 2012-05-23 11:13:09.000000000
+0100
+++ nagvis-1.6.4.dfsg.1/debian/control 2012-05-28 17:50:29.463726455 +0100
@@ -13,36 +13,29 @@
Architecture: all
Depends: ${misc:Depends}, php5-common (>= 5.3.0), libapache2-mod-php5,
php5-gd, ucf, graphviz, php5-sqlite, php-net-socket, php-gettext,
check-mk-livestatus
Suggests: nagvis-demos
-Description: Visualization addon for Nagios or Icinga
- NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga Data, e.g. to display IT
- processes like a mail system or a network infrastructure.
+Description: visualization addon for Nagios or Icinga
+ NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga data, for instance
+ to display network traffic or IT services such as email.
.
- Key features are:
- .
- * Display of single Hosts or Services
- * Display the state of a Host dependent on the state of its services
- ("recognize services")
- * Visualization of Host- or Servicegroups with one icon
- * Define Sub-Map icons wich represent a complete NagVis Map of
- Hosts/Services/Groups in one icon (drill down)
- * Visualization of complete IT Processes using self drawn graphics
+ Its key features are:
+ * Display of single hosts or services;
+ * Representation of a host dependent on the state of its services;
+ * Visualization of complete host- or servicegroups with one icon;
+ * Organization of hosts/services/groups into Sub-Map icons;
+ * Graphical representation of complete IT systems.
Package: nagvis-demos
Architecture: all
Depends: ${misc:Depends}, nagvis (= ${source:Version})
-Description: Demo Mapgs for NagVis
- NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga Data, e.g. to display IT
- processes like a mail system or a network infrastructure.
+Description: visualization addon for Nagios or Icinga - demo maps
+ NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga data, for instance
+ to display network traffic or IT services such as email.
.
- Key features are:
+ Its key features are:
+ * Display of single hosts or services;
+ * Representation of a host dependent on the state of its services;
+ * Visualization of complete host- or servicegroups with one icon;
+ * Organization of hosts/services/groups into Sub-Map icons;
+ * Graphical representation of complete IT systems.
.
- * Display of single Hosts or Services
- * Display the state of a Host dependent on the state of its services
- ("recognize services")
- * Visualization of Host- or Servicegroups with one icon
- * Define Sub-Map icons wich represent a complete NagVis Map of
- Hosts/Services/Groups in one icon (drill down)
- * Visualization of complete IT Processes using self drawn graphics
- .
- This package contains some demonstration maps.
-
+ This package provides some demonstration maps.
diff -ru nagvis-1.6.4.dfsg.1.pristine/debian/nagvis.templates
nagvis-1.6.4.dfsg.1/debian/nagvis.templates
--- nagvis-1.6.4.dfsg.1.pristine/debian/nagvis.templates 2012-05-23
11:13:09.000000000 +0100
+++ nagvis-1.6.4.dfsg.1/debian/nagvis.templates 2012-05-28 16:19:23.775392432
+0100
@@ -2,21 +2,20 @@
Type: select
Default: icinga
Choices: icinga, nagios, other
-_Description: For which monitoring suite should NagVis be configured?
- This NagVis package supports the monitoring suites Icinga as well as
- well as Nagios using the check-mk-live broker backend. please choose the,
- respective entry.
+_Description: Monitoring suite used with NagVis:
+ The NagVis package supports Icinga as well as
+ Nagios, using the check-mk-live broker backend.
.
If you would like to use NagVis with a different backend or a different
- monitoring suite, please choose "other". You'll have to configure it
+ monitoring suite, please choose "other". You'll have to configure it
manually.
Template: nagvis/delete_on_purge
Type: boolean
Default: false
-_Description: Should the user created NagVis data be removed?
- During usage NagVis creates some file in /var/cache/nagvis and and
- /etc/nagvis (e.g. background images and map files), including a small
- database for authentification. If you don't need any of these files,
+_Description: Delete NagVis data when purging the package?
+ NagVis creates files in /var/cache/nagvis and
+ /etc/nagvis (for instance background images and map files), including a small
+ database for authentification. If you don't need any of these files,
they can be removed now, or you may want to keep them and clean up by hand
later.
Source: nagvis
Section: net
Priority: extra
Maintainer: Debian Nagios Maintainer Group
<pkg-nagios-de...@lists.alioth.debian.org>
Uploaders: Jan Wagner <w...@cyconet.org>, Alexander Wirt <formo...@debian.org>,
Alexander Reichle-Schmehl <toli...@debian.org>
Build-Depends: debhelper (>= 7.0.50~), quilt, po-debconf
Standards-Version: 3.9.3
Homepage: http://www.nagvis.org
Vcs-Svn: svn://svn.debian.org/svn/pkg-nagios/nagvis/trunk/
Vcs-Browser: http://svn.debian.org/wsvn/pkg-nagios/nagvis/trunk/
Package: nagvis
Architecture: all
Depends: ${misc:Depends}, php5-common (>= 5.3.0), libapache2-mod-php5, php5-gd,
ucf, graphviz, php5-sqlite, php-net-socket, php-gettext, check-mk-livestatus
Suggests: nagvis-demos
Description: visualization addon for Nagios or Icinga
NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga data, for instance
to display network traffic or IT services such as email.
.
Its key features are:
* Display of single hosts or services;
* Representation of a host dependent on the state of its services;
* Visualization of complete host- or servicegroups with one icon;
* Organization of hosts/services/groups into Sub-Map icons;
* Graphical representation of complete IT systems.
Package: nagvis-demos
Architecture: all
Depends: ${misc:Depends}, nagvis (= ${source:Version})
Description: visualization addon for Nagios or Icinga - demo maps
NagVis can be used to visualize Nagios or Icinga data, for instance
to display network traffic or IT services such as email.
.
Its key features are:
* Display of single hosts or services;
* Representation of a host dependent on the state of its services;
* Visualization of complete host- or servicegroups with one icon;
* Organization of hosts/services/groups into Sub-Map icons;
* Graphical representation of complete IT systems.
.
This package provides some demonstration maps.
Template: nagvis/monitoring_system
Type: select
Default: icinga
Choices: icinga, nagios, other
_Description: Monitoring suite used with NagVis:
The NagVis package supports Icinga as well as
Nagios, using the check-mk-live broker backend.
.
If you would like to use NagVis with a different backend or a different
monitoring suite, please choose "other". You'll have to configure it
manually.
Template: nagvis/delete_on_purge
Type: boolean
Default: false
_Description: Delete NagVis data when purging the package?
NagVis creates files in /var/cache/nagvis and
/etc/nagvis (for instance background images and map files), including a small
database for authentification. If you don't need any of these files,
they can be removed now, or you may want to keep them and clean up by hand
later.
