On 21.3.2016 14:40, Pekka Paalanen wrote:
On Mon, 21 Mar 2016 13:43:06 +0100
Armin Krezović <[email protected]> wrote:
On 21.3.2016 8:57, Pekka Paalanen wrote:
On Sat, 19 Mar 2016 23:33:21 +0100
Armin Krezović <[email protected]> wrote:
On 13.03.2016 18:22, Armin Krezović wrote:
Hello Pekka, Quentin and Kat (sorry, don't know the real name yet).
Pekka and Quentin have volounteered to review my GSoC application
draft for the Wayland project. Pekka also suggested to add Kat to
the list of reviewers.
As suggested, I've used Google Docs to create a document. You can
access it at:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bBgH8h9UiAPkipGjxHePnmcVU73Tef033-xojVWIhCU/
Embedded below is the text from document, so you can comment on
individual sentences/paragraphs/etc if needed.
Thank you in advance and looking forward to your reply.
Armin.
Hi everyone,
The proposal has been updated to reflect all the feedback I've
received so far. I didn't include the text in the mail this time.
Pekka and Quentin should be able to comment on the Google document
which is available at the URL referenced above.
Please let me know if any other adjustments are needed.
Highlights:
- Completely rewrite Project Scope paragraph to include more details.
- Improve wording in Dedication paragraph so I sound more dedicated :).
- Extend Dedication paragraph to include additional information on
how the project will be realized.
If all goes well with this one, I plan to submit it on Monday, as
said in one of the replies.
Hi Armin,
Salut,
in "dedication" you refer to "the first part of my proposal" but that
is not too clear, I am left to guess what you mean.
Now that you mention it, it looks kinda confusing. How about now? I've
included 3 tasks in a list so it's more clear which is the first one.
Much better, now I think I can guess right. :-)
I could still nitpick on not defining what "parts" are, since the first
occurrence of the word "part" is in the dedication section and nothing
is called "a part" before that. ;-)
If you wrote "That includes three parts:" and numbered the bullet
points, that would make it perfectly clear. Then you can refer to part
1, part 2, etc.
Thanks,
pq
How about "the first item listed in my proposal" instead of the first
part? You can check the modified doc.
Thanks, Armin
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