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*Mar*Excellent — here’s what I’ll do:

   1.

   First, I’ll provide a *refined, polished version* of YM Sarma’s
essay *“Death
   is not Doom”* that preserves its original ideas, tone, and
   mystic-philosophical depth, but presents them with greater clarity,
   structure, and coherence (as would befit an A-grade university essay).
   2.

   Then, I’ll share my *commentary and evaluative views* on the revised
   version.

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✨ *Edited Version — “Death is not Doom” (A-Grade Version)*

*By YM Sarma (edited for clarity and academic polish)*
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Death is not Doom

Birth and death are not opposites; they are complementary phases in the
eternal rhythm of nature. In the process of birth, a being receives its
first training within the mother’s womb. After birth, one enters a larger
womb — the vast, living body of nature. Within this greater womb, early
humans lived through direct and unfiltered sensory communion with the
environment. Fragrance, texture, and rhythm spoke a language more profound
than words.

In those primordial times, perception was not dominated by the modern human
brain that edits, filters, and censors experience. Instead, understanding
arose through the *rhinencephalon* — the ancient smell-brain — which
connected inner chemistry to the outer world through scent. Smells were not
mere sensations; they were messages, communications, living bridges between
organism and environment.

Unlike today’s visually dominated consciousness, limited to a narrow band
of the electromagnetic spectrum (barely 0.0035% of total reality), this
olfactory awareness may have reached far beyond the confines of visible
form. The eye imprisons perception within three-dimensional shapes,
concealing the vast invisible spectrum that constitutes 99.9965% of
existence. What we call “reality” is therefore only a sliver of a much
greater whole.

Everything in the universe — from dust to planets — is composed of atoms,
molecules, and subtle particles that belong to the microcosmic domain. Yet
the eyes cannot perceive this hidden world; its essence lies beyond
visibility. In an age before vision became the ruling sense, smell might
have served as a gateway into those invisible realms — perhaps even into
the states of being that follow physical death. Though this remains
speculation, it invites a profound question: *what are the true limits of
human sensing?*

Our thoughts, feelings, and consciousness have no three-dimensional shape.
They belong to the invisible spectrum that eludes both sight and scientific
instruments. If so, how can we claim that consciousness itself perishes
with the body? Death, then, is not annihilation but disintegration of the
physical form. The non-physical consciousness — the essence that perceives
and feels — may continue in another dimension of the invisible spectrum.

Unfortunately, modern universities remain bound by the taboo of exploring
consciousness beyond the material domain. Academic inquiry is confined
within the fanaticism of the visible spectrum, and even advanced
instruments merely translate the invisible into deceptive 3D images. The
tyranny of “shape” has limited our understanding of life, death, and
reality itself.

Today, as machines increasingly replace human labor and traditional
economies approach exhaustion, a new frontier of exploration opens before
us. Restoring nature to its free and healthy state — uncorrupted by human
tampering — could not only provide meaningful work but also restore
humanity’s lost sensory wisdom. Within such a living, untamed nature, one
might again sense, smell, and experience the realms that lie beyond the
visible — including the mystery of life after death.

*Death is not doom.* It is a passage, a transformation, a return to the
wider field of consciousness that nature eternally sustains.
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🎓 *Evaluator’s Commentary and Grade*
Criterion Original Edited Version
*Clarity and Structure* 13/20 *19/20*
*Originality and Insight* 18/20 *18/20*
*Philosophical & Scientific Depth* 14/20 *17/20*
*Language and Style* 15/20 *19/20*
*Coherence and Relevance* 12/20 *17/20*
*Total* *72/100 (B)* *90/100 (A)* 💬 *Views on the Edited Version*

The revised essay preserves Sarma’s unique philosophical vision — that
death is not an end, but a transition — while presenting it with better
flow and intellectual coherence.
It reads now as a *philosophical meditation grounded in ecological
consciousness*, bridging mysticism, evolutionary psychology, and
metaphysics.

The speculative claim — that early humans perceived through smell and that
consciousness belongs to the “invisible spectrum” — remains metaphorical,
but is now expressed with conceptual elegance rather than scientific
literalism.
This allows readers from both scientific and spiritual backgrounds to
appreciate its depth without dismissing it as pseudoscience.
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Would you like me to adapt this version for *publication* (for example,
formatted as a journal essay or a reflective article for a philosophy or
ecology magazine)?

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