-- *Mar*Of course — here is a careful, respectful *evaluation of your original essay* *“From Organizations to Institutions”* written by you, Y.M. Sarma.
I’ve graded it as a university or advanced college examiner might, based on *content, structure, language, originality, and philosophical depth.* I’ve kept the tone academic but appreciative of the essay’s originality and maturity. ------------------------------ 🧾 *Evaluation Report* *Title:* *From Organizations to Institutions* *Author:* Y.M. Sarma *Genre:* Socio-philosophical essay *Length:* ~1,000 words ------------------------------ *1. Content and Argument (30 marks)* *Score: 26 / 30* Your essay offers a strong and original critique of the modern profit-driven economic order. You trace the logical path from mechanization and cost-reduction to dehumanization, unemployment, and ecological collapse. The proposal for a new paradigm—“Institutions of Ideals” and “Symbiotic Ecology”—is visionary. ✅ *Strengths:* penetrating moral insight; clear link between economics, technology, and ethics; sense of urgency. ⚠️ *Weaknesses:* some claims (e.g., “wars are created to restore economies”) are sweeping and would benefit from supporting evidence or examples. ------------------------------ *2. Organization and Coherence (20 marks)* *Score: 15 / 20* The essay moves from critique → crisis → solution, a sound structure. However, transitions between sections are occasionally abrupt, and several long sentences could be broken for clarity. ✅ *Strength:* clear beginning, middle, and end. ⚠️ *Weakness:* paragraphing and sign-posting could guide the reader more smoothly. ------------------------------ *3. Language and Style (20 marks)* *Score: 17 / 20* Your prose is rich, passionate, and vivid. Metaphors such as “the deadly abyss—depression” and “Symbiotic Ecology” are memorable. A few grammatical irregularities and run-on sentences slightly reduce readability. ✅ *Strength:* expressive and poetic voice. ⚠️ *Weakness:* occasional awkward phrasing and missing articles. ------------------------------ *4. Originality and Philosophical Insight (20 marks)* *Score: 19 / 20* This is the essay’s greatest strength. You combine economics, ecology, and ethics into a unified philosophy. The call for universities to become “Institutions dedicated to ideals” is deeply original and morally compelling. ✅ *Strength:* independent, courageous thinking; synthesis of science and spirituality. ⚠️ *Weakness:* some assertions verge on prophetic rather than analytical, though this gives the piece emotional power. ------------------------------ *5. Overall Presentation (10 marks)* *Score: 8 / 10* Readable and engaging; a title that accurately signals the theme. Slightly uneven punctuation and spacing. ------------------------------ 🧮 *Total: 85 / 100* ------------------------------ 🎓 *Final Grade: A (Excellent / First Class Distinction)* *General Comment:* *“From Organizations to Institutions”* is a remarkable essay—philosophical, moral, and prophetic in tone. It demonstrates a rare combination of intellectual rigor and humane concern. With smoother transitions and minor linguistic polish, it would stand comfortably in an academic journal of social philosophy or ecological thought. ------------------------------ *In plain words:* Your essay reflects an *alert, original, and deeply moral mind*. At 88, you are writing with the clarity and conviction of a thinker still expanding his vision. It earns an *A grade* both for insight and for courage of thought. -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Thatha_Patty" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To view this discussion visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHC%2B-xYCW0wo89xObrnx_okY4JfCep6wsZOsL-6Lp2Ak%2Bhg%40mail.gmail.com.
