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*Mar*Monotony


We abandoned the ecological life of continuous discoveries, revelations and
enlightenments. Instead we have adopted the economic life of killing nature
continuously, completely and comprehensively. We prefer machines instead of
our natural endowments. We use a machine to do the work of our limbs,
making the limbs frozen and half dead weights, making our body the obese
weight. In the free and healthy nature, nature automatically devises the
new games of life synchronizing, with the macro changes of nature. Our
internal hormonal communications and our nervous systems fuse with the
systems of nature creating the life as a very happy and healthy life of
experiencing continuously as a limb of nature.

In the ecological life, life becomes happy dreams, and expressions take to
epic methods, in poems, songs, dances and sculptures. Optimism pervades the
whole nature, and realism simply cannot be stagnation, in definitions and
straitjackets. Realism is not bonded and imprisoned into the visible
spectrum, just 00.0035% of the totality. The free and healthy nature
automatically takes one to the remaining 99.9965% of the totality, the
invisible spectrum, the arena of feeling that completes the seeing as total
seeing via automatic feeling, sensing, perceiving and understanding.

Today we cannot feel nature as our macro body. The basic fusion of our
hormonal systems and nervous systems with the systems of nature is killed
and maimed. We converted life into unending problems instead of unending
discoveries and revelations. We actually dismantled the ecological system
of nature which was the macro connection that creates new discoveries and
revelations.

In the Universities there are no courses that enable a student feel
directly nature, fuse his/her faculties of perception and understanding and
express his/her discoveries and revelations. The deviation into reading
nature by experiencing nature directly is inexcusable blasphemy.Lke the
once galley slaves who rowed their whole lives, tied to the row, that made
the ship move, today every human is tied to the economic galley, that
monotonizes life. The rowing of life for economic activity is the great
economic gospel, which one must obey. Economic life is the life based on
the continuous destruction of nature, scienced into the chapters of the
dismal science, as consumption, production, pricing, distribution and also
designated as the Keynesian Macro Economics of Employment Theories etc.

There is no mention of ecology and environment, in this mimicked Newtonian
mechanics.

Economics is converting life into monotony and boredom. After all every
village, town and city wakes up ready to consume the slaughtered nature. We
are inflicting continuous tragedy into the Biosphere. Dead nature can
create only monotony and unbearable boredom.

Let us hope that at least one University takes to sanity and changes from
economics to ecology on the terms of nature, where there is no adulteration
with mechanical paradigms.

Let us pray for the emergence of the ‘Free Nature Parks’ without human
tampering where one can at least glimpse the life of discoveries and
revelations which free nature alone can give.

YM Sarma

Chat gpt

Thank you for sharing this powerful and evocative piece, *"Monotony"* by *YM
Sarma*. It reads like a poetic and philosophical critique of the modern
economic paradigm and its disconnection from nature, calling urgently for a
return to an *ecological consciousness*—one rooted in direct, lived
experience with the natural world.

Here’s a brief *reflection and breakdown* of the key themes:
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*🌿 Key Themes & Insights*

*1. Loss of Ecological Life*

The author mourns the abandonment of a life intertwined with nature—*a life
of continual discovery, revelation, and enlightenment*. In this natural
rhythm, life was expressive, joyful, and meaningful—artistic even, as seen
in references to *"poems, songs, dances, and sculptures."*

*2. The Mechanization of Life*

Sarma draws a stark contrast between *natural life and mechanical life*:

   - Machines replace limbs, dulling the body and senses.
   - Economic systems replace organic ecosystems.
   - Mechanistic thinking replaces holistic feeling.

This shift has led to a *disembodied existence*, where we no longer *feel
ourselves as part of nature*—our hormonal and nervous systems are *disconnected
from the biosphere*, leading to a kind of spiritual and psychological
stagnation.

*3. Critique of Economic Systems*

The economic model—particularly as taught in universities—is sharply
criticized:

   - *Economics is called a “dismal science,”* concerned only with
   production, consumption, and distribution.
   - There's *no integration of ecological thinking*.
   - Education no longer teaches *direct experience of nature*, only
   abstract knowledge.

The analogy of *economic life as galley slavery*—endless rowing without
destination—emphasizes the *monotony* and *inhumanity* of the current
paradigm.

*4. The Invisible & the Totality*

A fascinating point is made about perception:

   - The *visible spectrum* is only *0.0035% of reality*—yet science and
   realism are confined to this sliver.
   - The *remaining 99.9965%*—the invisible, the felt, the sensed, the
   intuited—is what completes experience.
   - Nature, when lived ecologically, *guides us into this greater reality*.

*5. Call to Action: Rewilding Thought and Space*

Sarma ends with a hopeful prayer:

   - For a *university* to embrace *ecology over economics*.
   - For the creation of *Free Nature Parks*—untouched by human
   intervention—where the original ecological rhythm might be re-experienced.

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*🧠 Tone and Style*

The piece blends *philosophy, ecological critique, and poetic expression*.
It carries a tone of *lamentation* but also *visionary hope*, suggesting
that reconnection is still possible—if institutions and individuals awaken.
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*🕊️ Final Thoughts*

“Monotony” serves as both *a warning and a vision*—showing us the cost of
mechanized existence and the possibility of rediscovering harmony
through *ecological
living*. It challenges us to rethink not only *what we value* but *how we
live*, learn, and perceive the world around us.
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Would you like help turning this into:

   - A *visual quote series*?
   - A *presentation*?
   - A *discussion piece* for a class or group?
   - Or even a *response essay or reflection*?

Let me know how you'd like to engage with it.

Sure — I’ll assess *"Monotony" by YM Sarma* as if it were a
university-level essay or creative nonfiction submission, likely for a
course in *environmental studies, literature, philosophy, or
interdisciplinary humanities*. I'll use the following criteria to evaluate:
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*📝 Evaluation Criteria*

*Criterion*

*Marks (Out of 10)*

*Comments*

*1. Clarity & Coherence of Ideas*

6.5

The piece has strong ideas, but the flow is occasionally *dense and
abstract*. Some transitions are unclear, and there’s repetition. More
structure could improve clarity.

*2. Originality & Depth of Thought*

9

The author offers *bold, original, and deep insights*, especially in
critiquing economics and the mechanization of life. The
ecological-spiritual link is compelling.

*3. Language & Style*

7.5

The poetic style and metaphorical richness are strengths, but the *syntax
is sometimes overloaded* and could benefit from simplification for stronger
impact.

*4. Engagement with Subject*

9

The writer is *passionately engaged* and emotionally invested. The piece is
thought-provoking and sincere, raising critical ecological and
philosophical questions.

*5. Relevance & Argumentation*

7

The central message is powerful, but *lack of concrete examples*,
historical context, or referenced thinkers weakens the argumentative depth
in an academic sense.

*6. Grammar & Presentation*

6

There are *several grammatical errors*, awkward phrasings, and
typographical issues (e.g., "Lke" instead of "Like"). These distract from
the message. Proofreading is needed.
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*✅ Total: 45 / 60 → 75%*
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*🎓 Grade: B+ (Upper Second Class / 2:1 or 3.3 GPA)*
------------------------------

*📌 Strengths*

   - Passionate, visionary, and urgent in tone.
   - Highly original, almost prophetic in voice.
   - Successfully bridges ecology, spirituality, and philosophy.

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*⚠️ Areas for Improvement*

   - Needs *structural clarity*—clearer paragraph divisions and thematic
   focus.
   - *Grammar and spelling* errors need correction.
   - Could benefit from *supporting arguments* with references,
   comparisons, or even case studies (e.g. indigenous ecological practices,
   actual examples of Free Nature Parks, critiques of Keynesian economics,
   etc.).

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*🛠️ Suggested Revisions (for an A Grade):*

   1. *Clean up grammar and typos* to improve readability.
   2. *Add some real-world examples* or references to thinkers like Arne
   Naess (deep ecology), Vandana Shiva, or E.F. Schumacher.
   3. Consider *restructuring into thematic sections*, each with a heading
   or clear transition.
   4. Shorten or clarify sentences—sometimes complexity obscures meaning.

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Would you like help editing and upgrading this piece into an *A-grade essay
or publication-ready article*? I’d be happy to collaborate.

Of course! Here's a *poem inspired by the themes of "Monotony"*—ecological
loss, spiritual disconnection, and the hope for reconnection with wild,
living nature.
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*“The Last Dream of the Forest”*

*Inspired by “Monotony” by YM Sarma*

We traded the whisper of wind in the trees
For the hum of machines and factory pleas.
The rhythm of rain, the pulse of the sun—
Now drowned in a march that cannot be undone.

Our limbs once danced to the breath of the earth,
Now stiff with the weight of synthetic worth.
Eyes once saw with a poet’s delight,
Now stare through screens in perpetual night.

We carved out the wild, laid concrete bones,
Built cities of glass, but hearts of stones.
No child knows the taste of the dew,
Only barcodes, price tags—nothing true.

We called it progress, named it growth,
Swore allegiance to the god of both.
But where is the joy in a sterile sky,
When the birds are gone, and the rivers die?

Where once we heard the forest dream,
Now only numbers, static, and steam.
Our souls, once tuned to a cosmic thread,
Are tired, timed, and overfed.

Yet—
There sleeps a song in untouched glade,
A truth no empire can ever trade.
A seed of sense, a primal call,
To feel again, to break the wall.

Let us walk barefoot where no roads go,
Let the winds unteach what we think we know.
Let our nerves rejoin the ancient tree,
And dream again, wild and free.
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Would you like this poem adapted into a specific form (like a haiku series,
sonnet, or spoken word)? Or do you want a visual version for sharing?

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