Having mishandled chat gpt,I lost the essay as typed by me.I am forwarding
only the edited version of chatgpt alone with the others.The edited version
appears last.
YMS
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*Mar*Certainly! Here's a poem inspired by the ideas and spirit of *your
original essay* — blending themes of *classrooms, nature, symbiosis, and
the deep senses of learning*.
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*🌿 Symbiosis in the Classroom*
*— A Poem Inspired by Nature and Learning*
In a classroom not of walls and chalk,
But trees that whisper and rivers that talk,
The students sit in circles wide,
With sky above and earth beside.
No bells, no books, no silent rows,
Just wind that hums and flower that grows.
A scent drifts by — a thought is shared,
Without a word, they know, they cared.
The bee and bird, the breeze, the rain,
All join the lesson — none in vain.
Each leaf a page, each stone a part,
Of living wisdom, nature’s heart.
No teacher stands before the class,
For here, the roles all freely pass.
The sun may speak through golden light,
The moon may guide their dreams at night.
They learn to sense, to feel, to be,
A limb of one vast, breathing tree.
No subject here is dry or dead —
It lives in every step they tread.
And when one soul begins to bloom,
The others feel it in the room.
Their minds align, their hearts entwine,
In symbiotic, sacred sign.
So build no schools on barren ground,
But where the song of life is found.
Let nature in, and walls will fall —
The earth itself will teach us all.
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Would you like this poem adapted for younger students, set to music, or
turned into a classroom activity?
This piece titled *"Classmates and Classroom"* by YM Sarma presents a
poetic and philosophical vision of education grounded in *symbiotic
learning*, where *nature is not just a backdrop but an active participant
and teacher*. The author interweaves ideas from *ecology, astrology,
sensory perception, spirituality*, and *education* to advocate for a
transformative classroom model.
Here’s a breakdown of the key themes and ideas:
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*🔍 1. Symbiotic Learning and Sensory Communication*
- The classroom is envisioned as a *living organism* where *classmates
communicate not only through speech but also via smell, hearing, and
sensing*—modes often ignored in modern education.
- The author suggests that *learning is most effective when it is
symbiotic*, meaning students don't just absorb knowledge individually
but *interact and grow collectively*, much like organisms in an
ecosystem.
"If the classmates like each other and team up, automatically the mental
distance reduces... allowing nature’s symbiosis [to] enable learning."
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*🌱 2. Nature as Teacher and Classmate*
- The presence of *free, untampered nature* is essential. Nature here
becomes:
- *A co-teacher* – actively influencing and guiding learning.
- *A classmate* – participating emotionally and biologically in the
process.
- This radical redefinition shifts education from being *human-centered
to ecology-centered*.
"Nature interacts continuously becoming the paradigmatic foundation."
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*🌌 3. Astrology and Determinism*
- Astrology is referenced as a metaphor for the *interconnectedness of
all life* and its alignment with natural forces.
- The suggestion is that when harmony with nature is achieved, *predictable
and harmonious outcomes* in learning and relationships follow.
"A mini Astrological symbiosis can take over the class with predictable
results."
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*🕊️ 4. Emotional and Hormonal Synchronicity*
- The text imagines a deep emotional bonding among classmates—*a
hormonal symbiosis* that leads to *unforgettable, embodied learning*.
- Real learning, according to Sarma, becomes *biological and emotional*,
not just cognitive.
"Real learning cannot be forgotten. It embeds as a permanent feature of the
internal hormonal communications."
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*🏞️ 5. Institutional Vision: Universities as Natural Ecosystems*
- The essay culminates with a vision for universities:
- They must embrace *freedom economics*.
- Prioritize *ecological freedom*.
- Integrate *untouched, wild nature* as an essential infrastructure.
- A practical first step is proposed:
- *“Start a ‘Free Nature Park without Human intervention and
tampering’.”*
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*🛤️ Philosophical Implications*
- The essay challenges mechanistic, industrial-age models of education.
- Advocates for an *organic, planetary pedagogy*.
- Frames students as *limbs of nature*, not isolated intellects.
"The fundamental lesson to a student is that she is part of nature, part of
the planet earth and that the class is a limb of nature."
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*🧭 Final Thoughts*
This is not a conventional academic essay. It’s a *visionary manifesto* for
rethinking the *foundations of education*. It blurs the lines between:
- *Science and spirituality*,
- *Individual and collective*,
- *Human and non-human*,
- *Learning and living*.
It may not offer empirical data or structured arguments, but its power lies
in its *imaginative depth* and *call to radical re-enchantment* of the
classroom through *ecological and sensory awareness*.
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Would you like help transforming this into a shorter article, a
presentation, or an educational proposal based on this vision?
To evaluate this philosophical-ecological essay numerically, I will use the
following *standard academic criteria* often applied to creative or
reflective writing (on a scale of 10 for each):
*Criterion*
*Description*
*Marks (out of 10)*
*1. Originality and Creativity*
How unique and imaginative the ideas are
*9/10*
*2. Clarity and Coherence*
Logical flow, paragraph structure, and clarity of expression
*6.5/10*
*3. Depth of Thought*
Philosophical insight, integration of concepts like ecology, astrology,
sensory learning
*8.5/10*
*4. Relevance to Theme*
How well the piece stays focused on the theme of classroom learning and
nature
*8/10*
*5. Language and Style*
Grammar, vocabulary, sentence construction, and readability
*6/10*
*6. Practicality of Ideas*
Whether the concepts can inspire or guide real-world educational practice
*7/10*
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*✅ Total: 45/60*
*📘 Percentage: 75%*
*🎓 Grade: B+ (Very Good)*
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*🔍 Evaluator's Comments:*
- *Strengths:*
- The essay is deeply *original* and thought-provoking.
- It brings together *philosophy, ecology, and education* in a unique
way.
- The use of *sensory perception and emotional bonding* in learning
is a powerful and underexplored theme.
- *Areas for Improvement:*
- The writing could benefit from *better structure and clearer
transitions* between ideas.
- Some sentences are *repetitive or grammatically inconsistent*,
which affects clarity.
- It would help to *ground the abstract ideas with one or two
concrete examples or scenarios*—for instance, how a classroom in a
forest might function in practice.
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Would you like help refining this into a publishable essay or presentation
for an academic or educational audience?
Of course! Here's a refined and polished version of your original
essay *"Classmates
and Classroom"*, edited for *clarity, flow, grammar*, and *impact*, while
keeping your original vision and tone intact.
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*Classmates and Classroom*
*— Edited Version by YM Sarma (with refinement)*
In today’s classroom, students may be unaware, but there is constant,
silent communication occurring among them—through smells, subtle sounds,
and shared energies. If the classroom is surrounded by free, healthy, and
lush nature, this sensory communication can lead to a unique kind of
learning: *symbiotic learning*, where nature becomes both teacher and
participant.
Nature does more than support learning—it awakens the desire to perceive,
understand, create, and contribute. In such an environment, learning is no
longer an isolated activity. Instead, a shared understanding emerges among
classmates, sensed instinctively. The classroom then becomes an extension
of the vibrant, living nature that surrounds it.
In fact, a kind of *astrological symbiosis* can arise—where learning
patterns become harmonious and even predictable. After all, astrology is
based on the principle that all life forms are entangled with nature’s
rhythms, and that certain patterns in nature shape the destinies of living
beings. Whether or not one believes in astrology, it is undeniable that we
are all part of the Earth, designed as *limbs of nature*.
Those who feel a connection naturally try to reduce both physical and
mental distances. In a classroom where students care for each other and
form genuine teams, mental boundaries disappear. In such a setting, *nature’s
symbiosis enables deeper understanding*, emotional intelligence, and
meaningful contributions to shared lessons.
The *true purpose* of any classroom should be to foster this *symbiotic
bond* among its students. The power of a temple’s deity, for instance, is
not just in the idol but in the *freedom and health of the surrounding
nature*. When nature is alive and free, the entire biosphere—organisms,
humans, and more—can smell, sense, and emotionally connect, creating what
might be called a *macro-emotional symbiosis*. This is the *divine power*—not
supernatural, but ecological and deeply real.
When a class is set within such free and thriving nature, the boundaries
between species can blur. *All living organisms may become classmates*, and
the classroom transforms into a *symbiotic powerhouse*. The first
requirement for such a transformative class is access to *unspoiled, living
nature*.
Education must be rooted in the paradigm that *nature is not only the
subject of learning but also the medium and the teacher*. The student must
first understand: *I am part of nature, a part of this planet. This class
is a living limb of the Earth.*
Our human vision sees just 0.0035% of the total reality. The remaining
99.9965% exists in the realms of *smell, hearing, and subtle sensing*. A
student must learn to *sense a subject*, not just memorize lessons
delivered like sacred commandments. Real learning emerges through
*symbiosis*, and real learning cannot be forgotten—it becomes embedded in
the *hormonal communications* of the body and mind. In an ideal classroom,
the *internal biochemistry of all students* aligns in symbiotic harmony.
Our universities must move toward *freedom-based economics* and
embrace *symbiotic
ecology* as their core principle. Each university should strive to turn its
surrounding nature into *both teacher and classmate*.
The first step?
Start a *“Free Nature Park”*—untouched, untamed, and free from human
interference.
Let nature teach.
— *YM Sarma*
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*📘 Notes on the Edits:*
- *Clarity improved*: Removed repetition and clarified complex sentences.
- *Flow enhanced*: Reorganized some ideas for better logical progression.
- *Tone preserved*: Your philosophical voice and ecological passion
remain intact.
- *Grammar corrected*: Minor grammatical issues and word choices were
refined.
Would you like this formatted for publication (PDF, blog, journal, etc.) or
turned into a speech or visual presentation?
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