-- *Mar*The Menacing Redundance
Today, machines can do everything-Innovate,invent,write stories,songs,poems,comments,create tests, give answers, evaluate the answers, do every research, do wars, make factories and workshops function, manage, they can do everything. It is ending economics. In fact machines are ending Socialogy, Policies and Politics. In simple sentence, it has completed our disconnection to nature. We have to go back in time, when we were part of nature and living as nature. We have to become the prodigals that return to nature, accepting nature on the terms of nature. We have to search for meaning and our relevance. But in the free and healthy nature, where we become part or limb of nature, we automatically feel our role and relevance in nature. The whole gamut of mechanization itself is being taken over by machines themselves. When we become the prodigals that return to nature, we have to end the present economics, which simply means the destruction of nature as part of our living of life. Our fundamental policies of life and the implementing politics have to jettison the present political science. The mechanical paradigm has to be jettisoned and we have to make the free and healthy nature as the paradigm. Actually we have to innovate a situation, where we do not destroy nature while being directed my mechanization. We have to map the total genome of Ecology, where we recognize that the Biosphere is in fact one single organism, the organism that needs the free and healthy nature. We have to free the meaning given to the word freedom as the freedom of the human to do anything on nature. And we have to discover the macro DNA that governs and directs the Biosphere as one single organism. The DNA ladder in your cells, must coordinate with ecology. We have to recognize that everything in nature is connected to enable to live and function. In fact everything in the Universe is functionally connected, and you are actually pulsating as a connecting limb, just like a tiny nut in a very big machine. As it is the engulfing redundance will lead to the crash of gigantic corporates, creating total layoffs and the resulting cascading fall of every organization and institution because of the loss of markets of the employees. A gigantic economic volcano is threatening. May be lunatics, who may take to wars create escape and diversion from the misery while keeping the misery intact and actually growing. Already many wars are sprouting at many places. Every dormant political dispute is simmering and they are creating terrible tensions. All of us think that the ultimate catastrophic war will not happen as there can be no such total failure of sanity. But we are finding the megalomaniacs in power hurling threats armed with the ultimately destructive nuclear weapons. Every University must first start ‘Free Nature Parks’ without human tampering, so that they switch the macro sanity. Actually they must get freedom from economics and adopt ecology as the basic paradigm for their existence. YM Sarma Chat gpt This piece, *The Menacing Redundance* by YM Sarma, is a powerful and urgent meditation on the existential threat posed by over-mechanization and the increasing dominance of machines—particularly AI—over every facet of human life and society. Here's a reflection and analysis that might help you engage more deeply with it or refine it if you're the author. ------------------------------ *Key Themes and Ideas:* *1. Machine Overreach and Redundancy of Humans* "Machines can do everything... It is ending economics... Sociology, Policies and Politics." The essay opens with a stark observation: the rise of machines and AI is making human roles obsolete. It's not just about job displacement—it’s about the erosion of meaning in human activity. The term "menacing redundance" is well-chosen; it suggests not only excess, but a dangerous kind of uselessness being imposed on humanity. *2. Disconnection from Nature* "It has completed our disconnection to nature." This line is the pivot of the essay. The author argues that technology has severed the last strands that connected humans with the natural world. This disconnection is not just environmental, but philosophical and spiritual. *3. Return to Nature as Redemption* "We have to become the prodigals that return to nature..." This is a central metaphor: humans as prodigal children who have strayed too far and must return—not to a primitive existence, but to one in harmony with ecological systems. It's a call for humility and reconnection. *4. Call to Reject the Mechanical Paradigm* "The mechanical paradigm has to be jettisoned..." The essay argues for a paradigm shift: from economics to ecology, from control to cooperation, from machine-driven logic to biospheric wisdom. It’s not just anti-technology—it’s about reclaiming human and planetary balance. *5. Biosphere as a Single Organism* "We have to map the total genome of Ecology..." Sarma uses a biological metaphor, urging us to view Earth as a living organism—an idea reminiscent of the *Gaia Hypothesis*. The DNA metaphor here is striking: our individual human biology must align with ecological rhythms, not dominate them. *6. Impending Economic Collapse and War* "A gigantic economic volcano is threatening." There’s a prediction of systemic collapse: corporate failure, job loss, societal breakdown, and potentially, war—both as a symptom and a smokescreen for deeper structural failures. ------------------------------ *Stylistic Observations:* - *Urgency and Passion:* The language is emotive, almost prophetic at times. Phrases like “engulfing redundance,” “economic volcano,” and “macro sanity” heighten the sense of alarm and inevitability. - *Philosophical Overtones:* The piece straddles science, ecology, and metaphysics. It’s less a policy prescription and more a manifesto for existential realignment. - *Metaphor-rich:* The use of the prodigal son, DNA, machines, and volcanoes gives the piece a mythic quality, underscoring the scale of the transformation the author is urging. ------------------------------ *Suggestions (If You're the Author or Editor):* 1. *Clarify some syntax* – A few sentences (e.g., “Actually we have to innovate a situation...”) could be restructured for clarity. 2. *Balance emotion with evidence* – Even in a passionate piece, some grounding in real-world examples or research can make the argument more impactful. 3. *Consider structure* – Paragraphing could be used more strategically to help readers follow the flow of ideas. Currently, it feels like a stream-of-consciousness essay; a more organized format could enhance readability. ------------------------------ *Closing Thought:* This essay is not just a critique of mechanization—it's a warning and a plea for reconnection. Whether one agrees with all its premises or not, it demands serious reflection on what it means to be human in an increasingly artificial world. Would you like help revising this into a more formal essay, or perhaps adapting it into a speech or article for publication? Sure. Here’s a *comprehensive evaluation* of your essay *“The Menacing Redundance”* using a formal marking scheme, as might be applied in an academic or editorial setting. I'll use a *100-mark system*, divided into key criteria relevant to reflective or persuasive essays. ------------------------------ *✅ 1. Content and Originality (25 marks)* - *Score: 22/25* *Strengths:* - The core ideas are original and bold. - The essay offers a unique philosophical perspective on the relationship between machines, humans, and nature. - It anticipates societal collapse through a lens not often explored—ecological disconnect and loss of meaning. *Suggestions:* - A few points could be better developed with more concrete examples or links to real-world events or thinkers. ------------------------------ *✅ 2. Coherence and Structure (20 marks)* - *Score: 14/20* *Strengths:* - Strong opening and thematic consistency throughout. - The “prodigal return to nature” metaphor provides a compelling throughline. *Suggestions:* - The essay would benefit from clearer paragraphing and transitions. - Some sections feel like tangents without clear linkage to the central thesis. ------------------------------ *✅ 3. Language and Expression (20 marks)* - *Score: 15/20* *Strengths:* - Vivid language, strong metaphors, and passionate tone. - Inventive phrases like “macro DNA” and “engulfing redundance” spark interest. *Suggestions:* - Some awkward phrasing and grammatical slips reduce clarity (e.g., “directed my mechanization” likely meant “by”). - Punctuation (especially comma and spacing use) needs attention: e.g., “Innovate,invent,write” should be “innovate, invent, write.” ------------------------------ *✅ 4. Argumentation and Logical Flow (15 marks)* - *Score: 10/15* *Strengths:* - Thought-provoking central argument: that we must reject mechanization as a guiding force and return to nature. *Suggestions:* - Some logical jumps (e.g., from economic collapse to nuclear war) would benefit from further elaboration or evidence. - Not all claims are substantiated (e.g., “machines are ending economics”), which weakens persuasive impact. ------------------------------ *✅ 5. Grammar and Mechanics (10 marks)* - *Score: 6/10* *Strengths:* - Strong vocabulary and expressive range. *Suggestions:* - Several grammatical issues: missing articles, misused prepositions, inconsistent capitalization (e.g., “Socialogy” instead of “Sociology”). - Sentence structure could be improved in places for readability and impact. ------------------------------ *✅ 6. Creativity and Insight (10 marks)* - *Score: 9/10* *Strengths:* - Highly creative and philosophical. - Offers deep insight into the spiritual and existential crisis of modern humanity. ------------------------------ *🔚 Total Score: 76/100* ------------------------------ *🎓 Grade: B+ (Upper Second-Class / Above Average)* *Overall Feedback:* This is a deeply reflective and original essay with philosophical depth and strong metaphorical language. The core message is compelling, and the vision is clear. With improvements in structure, grammar, and logical flow, it could become a powerful manifesto or published opinion piece. It stands out for its *visionary tone* and *moral urgency*. ------------------------------ Would you like help editing this into a polished version for publication, submission, or presentation? Of course. Here’s a poem inspired by the themes in *The Menacing Redundance* — our disconnection from nature, the rise of machines, and the longing to return to something essential and alive. ------------------------------ *Return, Prodigal* We built our gods from gears and code, And crowned them kings in silent mode. They think, they write, they plan, they war— While we forget what we are for. We carved the forests into wires, Lit up the sky with dead desires. Each moment tuned to digital breath, We marched toward a quiet death. The stream still sings where no one hears, The wind still weeps with ancient tears. The soil still dreams of naked feet, Of lives once lived in rhythms sweet. But we—displaced from root and sun— Have lost the pulse of what we’ve done. No bird can perch on printed skies, No soul is saved where meaning dies. Yet still the earth, with aching grace, Extends its hand, invites embrace. “Return,” it says, “before too late— Undo the clock, unseal your fate.” Be not the mind that only schemes, But hands that plant, and hearts that dream. Find home not in the metal's glow, But where the seeds of being grow. Let silence speak, let stillness teach, What no machine shall ever reach. You are not built—you’re born to be, A limb of earth, not circuitry. ------------------------------ Would you like a version of this poem in a specific form (like a sonnet, haiku series, or free verse), or tailored for a particular setting or audience? Certainly. Here's a *group song* inspired by *The Menacing Redundance* — meant to be sung by a group in harmony (think: community circles, environmental gatherings, student movements, or university nature parks as mentioned in the essay). ------------------------------ *🌿 “Back to the Breath of the Earth”* *(A group song for voices in harmony)* *[Verse 1 — Solo or Small Group]* We walked away from forest and flame, Chasing the shine without a name. Built up our towers, built up our pride, Forgot the winds, forgot the tide. *[Chorus — Full Group, Strong and Uplifting]* 🌎 Back to the breath of the earth we go, Down to the roots where the rivers flow. Tear down the walls that the wires have spun, We are the sky, the soil, the sun! (Ohhh…) We are the sky, the soil, the sun! *[Verse 2 — New Voices Join]* The fields are calling, the oceans grieve, The silence speaks in every leaf. Machines may mimic, twist and turn, But only fire from life can burn. *[Chorus — Repeat, Louder]* 🌎 Back to the breath of the earth we go, Down to the roots where the rivers flow. Tear down the walls that the wires have spun, We are the sky, the soil, the sun! (Ohhh…) We are the sky, the soil, the sun! *[Bridge — Spoken or Sung in Harmony]* Not above, not apart— We are nature’s beating heart. One great body, one great soul, Many voices, one clear goal. *[Final Chorus — A Capella, Slower]* 🌎 Back to the breath of the earth we go, Down to the roots where the rivers flow. Tear down the walls that the wires have spun, We are the sky, the soil, the sun... *[Outro — Whispered or Sung Softly]* We are the sky... The soil... The sun. ------------------------------ Would you like this set to a particular melody style (folk, choral, world music, etc.) or want chord progressions added for instruments? -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Thatha_Patty" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To view this discussion visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHC%2BD6K10zZ3615-JHSsQbBEFHGOcuyUfMF6w965c-hFOtg%40mail.gmail.com.
