Thanks, kFarn ... it doesn't quite come together for me, either. I could fiddle with it a bit wrt crop and some space, but it just doesn't seem to be worth it for what would probably end up being an uninteresting print in the end.
One of the problems i see (which you wouldn't) is that I put my emotion into the image. The solitary bike on the train platform seemed to reflect how I was feeling at the moment, so it struck a chord in me, but even though there was that emotional connection the image was still weak. I think I knew that when I snapped the shutter, too, as i didn't work at all with the scene and take at least a few shots from slightly different perspectives. I was feeling ho-hum, took a shot that reflected that feeling, treated the whole scene with minimal interest and enthusiasm, and just went on about my business. elSh > [Original Message] > From: frank theriault <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> > To: <[email protected]> > Date: 5/18/2005 6:00:36 AM > Subject: Re: PAW PESO - Bike Waiting for a Train > > On 5/18/05, Shel Belinkoff <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > http://home.earthlink.net/~scbelinkoff/bikewaiting.html > > > > I was about to round file this one, but decided to post it here to see what > > the experts thought of it. It's just a rough "work print." Comments and > > crits welcome. > > > > Generally, I like it, but there's something missing here for me. I > can't quite put my finger on it, but I feel that it could be a > ~really~ good pic with some tweaking. > > Maybe the bike's too far to the left? Or, to put it another way, > maybe if there was a bit more "air" to the left of the bike (if that's > possible)? > > I really like the perspective, the wall's converging lines - very effective. > > I just think it all needs a bit more "oomph", but I'm at a loss to say > what that oomph might be. > > cheers, > frank > > -- > "Sharpness is a bourgeois concept." -Henri Cartier-Bresson
