On Tue, Dec 4, 2018 at 8:42 AM Michal Nowak <[email protected]> wrote:
> Hi, > > we are slightly updating the English "Welcome to OpenIndiana Hipster" > home page one can see when starting Firefox on MATE installation medium. > If you have release/os-welcome package installed you can see the > (localized) page at > > file:///usr/share/doc/openindiana-welcome/html/index.html > > Can a native English speaker read the changed text at > https://github.com/OpenIndiana/openindiana-welcome/pull/10/files and > provide feedback (either in the PR or here), please? > Here you go: [Quite a lot of the native englishness is getting commas correct.] "OpenIndiana is an illumos based Unix distribution" Is it OK to use Unix, which is a trademark? "OpenIndiana obtains its name from Project Indiana, an open source effort by Sun Microsystems (now Oracle Corporation) to produce OpenSolaris, a community developed Unix distribution based on Sun Solaris. Project Indiana was led by Ian Murdock, founder of the Debian Linux distribution." The OpenSolaris *distribution* wasn't anything to do with the community, it was purely an internal Sun effort. "Oracle's Sun Studio has been replaced ..." The Sun Studio compiler has been replaced ... In terms of changes, replacing GNOME with MATE would seem to merit a mention. "When operating system is updated ..." When the operating system is updated ... "ZFS features like Boot Environment and snapshots are leveraged in every respect of the process." Boot Enviromnents (plural) respect should be aspect "When Global Zone is updated, IPS makes sure, that packages in Zones are updated as well, or, at minimum, are kept in a coherent state." When the global zone is updated IPS ensures that packages in zones are consistent with the global zone, updating packages as necessary. "The Crossbow network virtualization framework and Role-Based Access Control (RBAC) model frameworks are also very well integrated with the rest of the system." Role-Based Access Control (RBAC) and Crossbow network virtualization are well integrated with the rest of the system. "Locality Groups (NUMA affinity) have been provided by the core operating system for many years, contrasting with other systems' reliance on "third-party" libraries." I'm not sure that's actuallly true, our NUMA support is pretty old now. "Considering the cross-pollination of technologies with FreeBSD and Linux, our code-base had contributed in a notable extent to operating system's innovation. Hence we still strive for relevance, observability, and consistency!" Considering the cross-pollination of technologies with FreeBSD and Linux, our code-base has contributed to a notable extent in operating system innovation. Hence we still strive for relevance, observability, and consistency! "Currently build servers, hosting and bandwidth is donated by EveryCity hosting in the UK." Currently, build servers, hosting, and bandwidth, is donated by EveryCity hosting in the UK. "Because our success as a operating system distribution depends upon the success of our community, please, feel welcome in our mailing lists, IRC channels, and GitHub projects." Because our success as a operating system distribution depends upon the success of our community, please feel welcome to participate in our mailing lists, IRC channels, and GitHub projects. -- -Peter Tribble http://www.petertribble.co.uk/ - http://ptribble.blogspot.com/ _______________________________________________ openindiana-discuss mailing list [email protected] https://openindiana.org/mailman/listinfo/openindiana-discuss
