inline w/ [DC] On Tue, May 20, 2025 at 4:45 PM Wes Hardaker <[email protected]> wrote:
> Deb Cooley via Datatracker <[email protected]> writes: > > > Section 1.1: The text in this section is not what I expected in a > section > > titled 'document audience'...Is this draft for implementers? > operators? My > > suggestions: move para 1 and 3 (both can go back into Section 1), put > para 5 > > first, and combine para 2 and 4. I will note that this suggestion is to > > improve readability. > > Thinking about this one still.... seems scary to change that much text > and layout that already had consensus from the WG especially and the > IETF as a whole. > [DC] It is all intro. Just would set the stage in a more coherent manner. > > > Section 4: What do the '[*]' mean? > > Fixed by removing them (see comments to Med). > [DC] where's my easy button? > > > *Section 5: Providing a direct quote from RFC8624 is fine, but then the > quote > > needs to be enclosed in "". And then the authors can't make changes to > it, > > because that makes it a paraphrase, not a quote. My opinion, providing > the > > quote/paraphrase here makes future work harder - harder to keep future > drafts > > in sync. My recommendation is to delete the last three paragraphs and > the last > > phrase of the first paragraph ',which we quote below'. > > 8624 obsoletes the other, so we do want to reproduce it rather than > reference it. > > So we changed it to: > > This document makes no modifications to the security of the > existing protocol or recommendations described in [RFC8624]. Thus, > the security considerations remain the same. The remainder of this > section restates that document's text. > [DC] This is fine, but put the old text in "" and revert it back to the original (there had already been changes!). > > -- > Wes Hardaker > My Games: https://frostedaxe.com/ > My Pictures: http://photos.capturedonearth.com/ >
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