Package: release-notes
Severity: wishlist
Tags: patch
Just to get the ball rolling here's a commented diff on one of the
files that has least need for proofreading. All I've got to suggest
are two very low-priority stylistic improvements.
Index: about.dbk
===================================================================
--- about.dbk (revision 11524)
+++ about.dbk (working copy)
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@
please file a bug in the <ulink url="&url-bts;">bug tracking
system</ulink> against the <systemitem
role="package">release-notes</systemitem> package. You
-might want to review first the <ulink url="&url-bts-rn;">existing bug
+might first want to review the <ulink url="&url-bts-rn;">existing bug
reports</ulink> in case the issue you've found has already been reported. Feel
free to add additional information to existing bug reports if you can
contribute content for this document.
(This feels like a clumsy attempt to avoid a "split infinitive", but
in fact the way I'd naturally phrase it is like this, which avoids the
issue anyway.)
@@ -132,7 +132,7 @@
<emphasis>Debian Documentation Project</emphasis>. You can use
the <ulink url="&url-svn-release-notes;">web interface</ulink> to
access its files individually through the web and see their
- changes. For more information on how to access the SVN please
+ changes. For more information on how to access SVN please
consult the <ulink url="&url-ddp-svn-info;">Debian Documentation
Project SVN information pages</ulink>.
</para>
I suppose developers may feel differently about this, but I wouldn't
naturally refer to a particular version control repository as "the"
SVN any more than I'd talk about checking something out of a git.
(The "Debian Documentation Project SVN information pages" also mention
git; is this SVN-only coverage in the release-notes still true or does
it need an update?)
--
JBR with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package
Index: about.dbk
===================================================================
--- about.dbk (revision 11524)
+++ about.dbk (working copy)
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@
please file a bug in the <ulink url="&url-bts;">bug tracking
system</ulink> against the <systemitem
role="package">release-notes</systemitem> package. You
-might want to review first the <ulink url="&url-bts-rn;">existing bug
+might first want to review the <ulink url="&url-bts-rn;">existing bug
reports</ulink> in case the issue you've found has already been reported. Feel
free to add additional information to existing bug reports if you can
contribute content for this document.
@@ -132,7 +132,7 @@
<emphasis>Debian Documentation Project</emphasis>. You can use
the <ulink url="&url-svn-release-notes;">web interface</ulink> to
access its files individually through the web and see their
- changes. For more information on how to access the SVN please
+ changes. For more information on how to access SVN please
consult the <ulink url="&url-ddp-svn-info;">Debian Documentation
Project SVN information pages</ulink>.
</para>
