Package: debian-handbook Version: 6.0+20120509 Severity: minor Hi Raphaël, I've just finished reading chapter 4. What follows is the list of improvements and corrections I propose for this chapter, again grouped by relevant section.
Section 4.2.1. Booting and Starting the Installer ------------------------------------------------- | In practice, the 64 bit version is only relevant on a server rather than | a desktop workstation, since it will cause difficulties with the use of | certain non-free software that are released only as binaries. I think this sentence is too strong. I mean: claiming that the amd64 version is irrelevant for desktop workstations, just because some non-free programs are not available for this architecture, seems to over-estimate the importance of those proprietary programs. I acknowledge that some people seem to consider those programs as essential, but not all users think the same! Implicitly saying that a desktop workstation is useless without those non-free programs indirectly promotes proprietary software: I believe that debian-handbook should *not* do that! I would drop the above-quoted sentence entirely, since the same reasoning is anyway included in the "Going further" box immediately below. | It is technically possible to make them work on 64 bit systems, For the reasons outlined above, I would add + If you really need those proprietary programs, it is technically possible + to make them work on 64 bit systems, | If you already have a working Windows system, you can even do without the | recovery CD-ROM; I am not sure this sentence should talk about recovery. Maybe s/recovery CD-ROM/installation CD-ROM/ ? Section 4.2.13. Starting the Partitioning Tool ---------------------------------------------- | has an "guided" mode Typo? s/an "guided"/a "guided"/ Section 4.2.13.1. Guided partitioning ------------------------------------- | server software data (/var/, Missing closing parenthesis after /var/ ? Section 4.2.15. Configuring the Package Manager (apt) ----------------------------------------------------- | (a mirror is a public server hosting copies of all the files of | the Debian server) I feel that "Debian server" is not especially clear. Maybe s/Debian server/Debian master archive/ ? -- To UNSUBSCRIBE, email to debian-bugs-dist-requ...@lists.debian.org with a subject of "unsubscribe". Trouble? Contact listmas...@lists.debian.org
