Dear Alice,

Similar to Benoit, in case you need an explicit approval, I approve. 
We already discussed the changes among the co-authors.

Regards,
Alex

> On 6 Apr 2026, at 19:57, Alice Russo <[email protected]> wrote:
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>> On Apr 2, 2026, at 12:08 AM, <[email protected]> 
>> <[email protected]> wrote:
>> 
>> Dear Alice,
>> 
>> Many thanks! Well done!
>> 
>> I reviewed the changes with my co-authors and they all look well. I only 
>> have some minor input below. Everything else if perfectly fine as you 
>> proposed.
>> 
>> Best wishes
>> Thomas
>> 
>> 1
>> ---
>> Keywords: Flow Record, Performance Metric, On-Path, Hybrid Type I, OAM
>> 
>> 
>> 2
>> ---
>> OLD:
>>  This correlation enables the detection of changes in
>>  forwarding paths, such as updated intermediate hops or interfaces,
>>  and the resulting impact on delay experienced by customer traffic.
>> 
>> NEW:
>>  This correlation enables the detection of changes in
>>  forwarding paths, such as updated intermediate hops or interfaces,
>>  and of the resulting impact on delay experienced by customer traffic.
>> 
>> 
>> 3
>> ---
>> OLD:
>>  This category includes multiple indexes of the registered performance
>>  metrics: the element Identifier and Metric Name.
>> 
>> NEW:
>>  This category includes multiple indexes of the registered performance
>>  metrics: the Identifier and Metric Name.
>> 
>> RFC editor remark: Identifier refers to 
>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/rfc8911#section-11.1.1 and Metric Name 
>> to https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/rfc8911#section-11.1.2
>> 
>> 
>> 11
>> ---
>> OLD:
>>  The mean (average) path delay can be calculated by dividing the
>>  pathDelaySumDeltaMicroseconds(533) by the packetDeltaCount(2) at the
>>  IPFIX data collection in order to offload the IPFIX Exporter from
>>  calculating the mean for every Flow at export time.
>> 
>> NEW:
>>  The mean (average) path delay can be calculated by dividing the
>>  pathDelaySumDeltaMicroseconds(533) by the packetDeltaCount(2) at the
>>  IPFIX data collection at the collection time instead of the IPFIX Exporter 
>> at
>>  the export time.
>> 
>> RFC editor remark: The sentence can optionally be further simplified by 
>> removing "at the collection" and "at the export time".
>> 
>> 
>> 18
>> ---
>> OLD: flow record
>> NEW: Flow Record
>> 
>> OLD: Singleton
>> NEW: singleton
>> 
>> 
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: [email protected] <[email protected]>
>> Sent: Tuesday, March 31, 2026 7:49 AM
>> To: Graf Thomas, SCS-INI-NET-VNC-E2E <[email protected]>; 
>> [email protected]; [email protected]
>> Cc: [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected]; 
>> [email protected]; [email protected]; 
>> [email protected]
>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9951 
>> <draft-ietf-opsawg-ipfix-on-path-telemetry-23> for your review
>> 
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>> or
>> (ii) "This correlation enables the detection and the impact."?
>> 
>> Original:
>>  This correlation enables the detection of changes in
>>  forwarding paths, such as updated intermediate hops or interfaces,
>>  and the resulting impact on delay experienced by customer traffic.
>> 
>> Perhaps (assuming (i), adding a second "of"):
>>  This correlation enables the detection of changes in
>>  forwarding paths, such as updated intermediate hops or interfaces,
>>  and of the resulting impact on delay experienced by customer traffic.
>> 
>> Or (assuming (i), for more precision):
>>  This correlation enables the detection of (a) changes in
>>  forwarding paths, such as updated intermediate hops or interfaces,
>>  and (b) the resulting impact on delay experienced by customer traffic.
>> -->
>> 
>> 
>> 3) <!--[rfced] Should "element Identifier" be "Information Element 
>> identifier"?
>> The latter term is used in RFC 7011 (which you had mentioned in the intake 
>> form).
>> 
>> Original:
>>  This category includes multiple indexes of the registered performance
>>  metrics: the element Identifier and Metric Name.
>> -->
>> 
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>> [RFC7011] somewhere in the network.
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>> [RFC7011] somewhere in the network.
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>>  Section 2 of [RFC2330].
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>> Perhaps:
>>  Note that terms such as "singleton" and "sample" are defined in
>>  Section 11 of [RFC2330].
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>> Original:
>>  see Section 5 of [RFC6703] for background on this analysis choice.
>> 
>> Suggested:
>>  see Section 5 of [RFC6703] for background on this analytic choice.
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>> 9) <!--[rfced] Please clarify "as defined to the following [...] 
>> dimensions"; should it be "as defined across the following [...] dimensions"?
>> 
>> Original:
>>  The measured On-Path delay can be aggregated with Flow Aggregation as
>>  defined in [RFC7015] to the following device and control-plane
>>  dimensions [IANA-IPFIX] to determine:
>> 
>> Perhaps:
>>  The measured On-Path delay can be aggregated with Flow Aggregation as
>>  defined in [RFC7015] across the following device and control-plane
>>  dimensions [IANA-IPFIX] to determine:
>> -->
>> 
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>> 
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>>  Let us consider the example depicted in Figure 1 from Section 1 as
>>  topology example.
>> 
>> Current:
>>   Let us consider Figure 1 as a topology example.
>> -->
>> 
>> 
>> 11) <!--[rfced] How may this be rephrased to avoid the odd phrase "offload 
>> the IPFIX Exporter from calculating the mean"?
>> Specifically, rather than "offload X from doing a task", we can offload the 
>> task - or we can offload X by doing the task elsewhere.
>> 
>> Original:
>>  The mean (average) path delay can be calculated by dividing the
>>  pathDelaySumDeltaMicroseconds(533) by the packetDeltaCount(2) at the
>>  IPFIX data collection in order to offload the IPFIX Exporter from
>>  calculating the mean for every Flow at export time.
>> 
>> Perhaps ("offload" changed to "prevent"):
>>  The mean (average) path delay can be calculated by dividing the
>>  pathDelaySumDeltaMicroseconds(533) by the packetDeltaCount(2) at the
>>  IPFIX data collection in order to prevent the IPFIX Exporter from
>>  calculating the mean for every Flow at export time.
>> -->
>> 
>> 
>> 12) <!--[rfced] We suggest changing "being accounted" to "being counted" 
>> here.
>> Please review the intended meaning.
>> 
>> Original:
>>  Unsigned64 has been chosen as type for pathDelaySumDeltaMicroseconds
>>  to support cases with large delay numbers and where many packets are
>>  being accounted.
>> 
>> Perhaps:
>>  Unsigned64 has been chosen as type for pathDelaySumDeltaMicroseconds
>>  to support cases with large delay numbers and where many packets are
>>  being counted.
>> -->
>> 
>> 
>> 13) <!--[rfced] Should "node" be plural "nodes"? In other words, is this 
>> about both an intermediate node and decapsulating node?
>> Also, is it accurate that "on-path delay" should be "On-Path delay" as it is 
>> elsewhere in this document?
>> 
>> Original:
>>  [...] and be read at the OAM header intermediate and decapsulating
>>  node to calculate the on-path delay.
>> 
>> Perhaps:
>>  [...] and be read at the OAM header intermediate and decapsulating
>>  nodes to calculate the On-Path delay.
>> -->
>> 
>> 
>> 14) <!--[rfced] Is the intended meaning that attacks by the receiver may be 
>> possible? If so, we suggest changing "for" to "by" or rephrasing otherwise.
>> 
>> Original:
>>  For example, exporting delay metrics may make attacks possible for
>>  the receiver of this information; ...
>> 
>> Perhaps:
>>  For example, exporting delay metrics may make attacks possible by
>>  the receiver of this information; ...
>> -->
>> 
>> 
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>>  [RFC7012] Claise, B., Ed. and B. Trammell, Ed., "Information Model for
>>  IP Flow Information Export (IPFIX)", RFC 7012, DOI 10.17487/RFC7012,
>>  September 2013, <https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc7012>.
>> -->
>> 
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>>  Taking Figure 1 from Section 1 as topology example.
>> 
>> Current:
>>  Let's take Figure 1 as a topology example.
>> -->
>> 
>> 
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>> previous format. (We note that Table 2 also adds spaces into IE names, 
>> perhaps in order get line breaks within the cell; please let us know if 
>> you'd like to make any updates to Table 2.)
>> 
>> Original (column headers):
>> path Delay Mean Delta Micro..
>> path Delay Min Delta Micro..
>> path Delay Max Delta Micro..
>> 
>> Perhaps intended as the IE names:
>> pathDelayMeanDeltaMicroseconds
>> pathDelayMinDeltaMicroseconds
>> pathDelayMaxDeltaMicroseconds
>> -->
>> 
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>> 
>> Thank you.
>> 
>> Alice Russo
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>>> RFC9951 (draft-ietf-opsawg-ipfix-on-path-telemetry-23)
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>>> Title            : Export of Delay Performance Metrics in IP Flow 
>>> Information Export (IPFIX)
>>> Author(s)        : T. Graf, B. Claise, A. Huang-Feng
>>> WG Chair(s)      : Joe Clarke, Benoît Claise
>>> Area Director(s) : Mohamed Boucadair, Mahesh Jethanandani
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