Hi Alanna, On #19 "Network Slice Service vs. Slice Service vs. IETF Network Slice Service", I recommend adopting “RFC 9543 Network Slice Service(s)” since RFC 9543 suggests to use “RFC 9543 Network Slice Service” for consistency.
Thanks, Bo -----Original Message----- From: Alanna Paloma <[email protected]> Sent: Friday, August 22, 2025 12:31 AM To: mohamed.boucadair <[email protected]>; [email protected]; OSCAR GONZALEZ DE DIOS <[email protected]>; [email protected]; Wubo (lana) <[email protected]> Cc: Mahesh Jethanandani <[email protected]>; RFC Editor <[email protected]>; [email protected]; opsawg-chairs <[email protected]>; LUIS MIGUEL CONTRERAS MURILLO <[email protected]>; auth48archive <[email protected]> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9834 <draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit-20> for your review Authors, This is a friendly reminder that we await your response to our previously sent questions. We will wait to hear from you before continuing with the publication process. The AUTH48 status page for this document is located here: https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9834 Thank you, Alanna Paloma RFC Production Center > On Aug 13, 2025, at 5:11 PM, Alanna Paloma <[email protected]> > wrote: > > Hi Mahesh, > > Thank you for confirming. We have noted your approval on the AUTH48 status > page: > https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9834 > > Best regards, > RFC Editor/ap > >> On Aug 13, 2025, at 3:08 PM, Mahesh Jethanandani <[email protected]> >> wrote: >> >> Hi Alanna, >> >> These changes look good to me. Thanks for working on them. >> >> Cheers. >> >>> On Aug 13, 2025, at 2:22 PM, Alanna Paloma <[email protected]> >>> wrote: >>> >>> Hi Mahesh, >>> >>> Thank you for the quick reply. The files have been updated accordingly. >>> >>> The files have been posted here (please refresh): >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.xml >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.txt >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.html >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.pdf >>> >>> The relevant diff files have been posted here: >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-diff.html (comprehensive >>> diff) https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-auth48diff.html >>> (AUTH48 changes) >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-auth48rfcdiff.html >>> (AUTH48 changes side by side) >>> >>> Thank you, >>> RFC Editor/ap >>> >>>> On Aug 13, 2025, at 1:45 PM, Mahesh Jethanandani <[email protected]> >>>> wrote: >>>> >>>> Hi Alanna, >>>> >>>>> On Aug 13, 2025, at 12:01 PM, Alanna Paloma >>>>> <[email protected]> wrote: >>>>> >>>>> Hi Mahesh, >>>>> >>>>> We have slightly updated your suggested text; see below. >>>>> >>>>> Additionally, we have a clarifying question. Should the section citation >>>>> be updated to match the template (Section 3.7 vs. Section 3.7.1)? >>>>> >>>>> Current: >>>>> The remainder of this section is modeled after the template >>>>> described in Section 3.7 of [YANG-GUIDELINES]. >>>>> >>>>> Template (https://wiki.ietf.org/group/ops/yang-security-guidelines): >>>>> This section is modeled after the template described in Section >>>>> 3.7.1 of [RFC-to-be draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8407bis]. >>>> >>>> Reference should be to Section 3.7.1. Thanks for catching it. >>>> >>>> I am not sure of the first line though that starts with “Template >>>> (https://…)”. That would be odd, as we have the reference to the template >>>> in rfc8407bis already. Giving another reference, this time to the wiki >>>> would be a duplicate reference. Please drop that line. >>>> >>>> Cheers. >>>> >>>>> >>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh): >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.xml >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.txt >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.html >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.pdf >>>>> >>>>> The relevant diff files have been posted here: >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-diff.html >>>>> (comprehensive diff) >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 >>>>> changes) >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-auth48rfcdiff.html >>>>> (AUTH48 changes side by side) >>>>> >>>>> Thank you, >>>>> RFC Editor/ap >>>>> >>>>>> On Aug 13, 2025, at 10:35 AM, Mahesh Jethanandani >>>>>> <[email protected]> wrote: >>>>>> >>>>>> Hi Alanna, >>>>>> >>>>>> Thanks for making the changes. Just one nit. Can we say? >>>>>> >>>>>> OLD: >>>>>> This section is modeled after the template described ... >>>>>> >>>>>> NEW: >>>>>> The remaining section is modeled after the template described … >>>>>> >>>>>> Thanks. >>>>>> >>>>>> >>>>>>> On Aug 13, 2025, at 9:27 AM, Alanna Paloma >>>>>>> <[email protected]> wrote: >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Hi Mahesh, >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Thank you for your reply. We have updated the Security Considerations >>>>>>> section accordingly; see the files below. >>>>>>> >>>>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh): >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.xml >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.txt >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.html >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834.pdf >>>>>>> >>>>>>> The relevant diff files have been posted here: >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-diff.html >>>>>>> (comprehensive diff) >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-auth48diff.html >>>>>>> (AUTH48 changes) >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9834-auth48rfcdiff.html >>>>>>> (AUTH48 changes side by side) >>>>>>> >>>>>>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9834 >>>>>>> >>>>>>> Thank you, >>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap >>>>>>> >>>>>>>> On Aug 12, 2025, at 10:00 PM, Mahesh Jethanandani >>>>>>>> <[email protected]> wrote: >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>> Hi Alice, >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> On Aug 11, 2025, at 10:48 PM, [email protected] wrote: >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Authors, AD, >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> * Mahesh (as AD), please reply to #13. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as >>>>>>>>> necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 1) <!--[rfced] In the RFC's title, we suggest removing the >>>>>>>>> single quotes and hyphens. Other expansions of "ACaaS" in the >>>>>>>>> document and the related documents would be updated >>>>>>>>> accordingly. Is the suggested title acceptable? (This is similar to >>>>>>>>> how "Software as a Service (SaaS)" >>>>>>>>> typically does not appear with hyphens when used as a noun.) >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> YANG Data Models for Bearers and 'Attachment >>>>>>>>> Circuits'-as-a-Service (ACaaS) >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Suggested: >>>>>>>>> YANG Data Models for Bearers and Attachment Circuits as a >>>>>>>>> Service (ACaaS) >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 2) <!--[rfced] In the second sentence below, does the customer >>>>>>>>> retrieve "a reference" or "an indication" or something else? >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> The customers can then retrieve a provider-assigned bearer >>>>>>>>> reference that they will include in their AC service requests. >>>>>>>>> Likewise, a customer may retrieve whether their bearers >>>>>>>>> support a synchronization mechanism such as Sync Ethernet (SyncE) >>>>>>>>> [ITU-T-G.781]. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>>>> The customers can then retrieve a provider-assigned bearer >>>>>>>>> reference that they will include in their AC service requests. >>>>>>>>> Likewise, a customer may retrieve a reference if their bearers >>>>>>>>> support a synchronization mechanism such as Sync Ethernet (SyncE) >>>>>>>>> [ITU-T-G.781]. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 3) <!--[rfced] FYI, we have reformatted some of the >>>>>>>>> definitions in the "Conventions and Definitions" section to >>>>>>>>> reflect what appears in RFCs-to-be 9833 and 9835. Please review and >>>>>>>>> let us know any changes. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 4) <!--[rfced] We note that the definitions for "Network >>>>>>>>> controller" and "Service orchestrator" in RFC-to-be 9835 each >>>>>>>>> have an additional sentence that does not appear in the >>>>>>>>> definition in this document. Should this sentence be added? >>>>>>>>> (Specifically, "One or multiple..." and "A service >>>>>>>>> orchestrator may interact..." are the additional sentences.) >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> This document (current): >>>>>>>>> Network controller: Denotes a functional entity responsible >>>>>>>>> for the management of the service provider network. >>>>>>>>> ... >>>>>>>>> Service orchestrator: Refers to a functional entity that >>>>>>>>> interacts with the customer of a network service. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> A service orchestrator is typically responsible for the >>>>>>>>> attachment circuits, the PE selection, and requesting the >>>>>>>>> activation of the requested service to a network controller. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> RFC-to-be 9835: >>>>>>>>> Network controller: Denotes a functional entity responsible >>>>>>>>> for the management of the service provider network. One or >>>>>>>>> multiple network controllers can be deployed in a service provider >>>>>>>>> network. >>>>>>>>> ... >>>>>>>>> Service orchestrator: Refers to a functional entity that >>>>>>>>> interacts with the customer of a network service. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> A service orchestrator is typically responsible for the >>>>>>>>> attachment circuits, the Provider Edge (PE) selection, and >>>>>>>>> requesting the activation of the requested services to a network >>>>>>>>> controller. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> A service orchestrator may interact with one or more network >>>>>>>>> controllers. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 5) <!--[rfced] Since "L2VPN" and "L3VPN" are defined prior to >>>>>>>>> these terms listed and to make the definitions more concise, >>>>>>>>> may we update to "LxVPN"? Note that this would also match the text in >>>>>>>>> RFC-to-be 9835. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> Service provider network: A network that is able to provide >>>>>>>>> network services (e.g., Layer 2 VPN, Layer 3 VPN, or Network >>>>>>>>> Slice Services). >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Service provider: An entity that offers network services >>>>>>>>> (e.g., Layer 2 VPN, Layer 3 VPN, or Network Slice Services). >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>>>> Service provider network: A network that is able to provide >>>>>>>>> network services (e.g., LxVPN or Network Slice Services). >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Service provider: An entity that offers network services >>>>>>>>> (e.g., LxVPN or Network Slice Services). >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 6) <!--[rfced] Figure 5 uses "CE#1" and "CE#2", while other >>>>>>>>> figures in the document use "CE1" and "CE2". May we update the >>>>>>>>> CEs in Figure 5 to match the other figures in the document? >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> If so, both artworks (svg and ascii-art) will be updated accordingly. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 7) <!--[rfced] To avoid repetition of "future", may we remove >>>>>>>>> "in the future" from this sentence? >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> Future placement criteria >>>>>>>>> ('constraint-type') may be defined in the future to >>>>>>>>> accommodate specific deployment contexts. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>>>> Future placement criteria >>>>>>>>> ('constraint-type') may be defined to accommodate specific >>>>>>>>> deployment contexts. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 8) <!--[rfced] To avoid redundancy, may we remove "when requesting a >>>>>>>>> bearer"? >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> A bearer request can indicate a device, a site, a combination >>>>>>>>> thereof, or a custom information when requesting a bearer. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>>>> A bearer request can indicate a device, a site, a combination >>>>>>>>> thereof, or custom information. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 9) <!--[rfced] To avoid redundancy, may we remove "actually"? >>>>>>>>> Note that there are a number of other places throughout the >>>>>>>>> document with similar phrasing, which would also be updated. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> 'actual-start': Reports the actual date and time when the >>>>>>>>> bearer actually was enabled. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 'actual-start': Reports the actual date and time when the >>>>>>>>> bearer was enabled. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 10) <!--[rfced] For clarity, may we update "by an identifier" to "of >>>>>>>>> an identifier"? >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> All the above mentioned profiles are uniquely identified by >>>>>>>>> the provider server by an identifier. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>>>> All the above mentioned profiles are uniquely identified by >>>>>>>>> the provider server of an identifier. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 11) <!--[rfced] We note that RFC 4271 is only cited in the >>>>>>>>> "ietf-ac-svc" YANG module. In order to have a 1:1 matchup >>>>>>>>> between the references section and the text, may we add it to >>>>>>>>> the RFCs listed prior to the YANG module and add a normative >>>>>>>>> reference for it? >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> This module uses types defined in [RFC6991], [RFC9181], >>>>>>>>> [RFC8177], and [I-D.ietf-opsawg-teas-common-ac]. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps:: >>>>>>>>> This module uses types defined in [RFC4271], [RFC6991], >>>>>>>>> [RFC9181], [RFC8177], and [RFC9833]. >>>>>>>>> ... >>>>>>>>> [RFC4271] Rekhter, Y., Ed., Li, T., Ed., and S. Hares, Ed., "A >>>>>>>>> Border Gateway Protocol 4 (BGP-4)", RFC 4271, >>>>>>>>> DOI 10.17487/RFC4271, January 2006, >>>>>>>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc4271>. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 12) <!--[rfced] FYI, the YANG module "ietf-ac-svc" has been >>>>>>>>> updated per the formatting option of pyang. Please let us know any >>>>>>>>> concerns. >>>>>>>>> (No changes were needed for "ietf-bearer-svc".) >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 13) <!--[rfced] *AD - We note that there is some text in the >>>>>>>>> Security Considerations section that differs from the template >>>>>>>>> on <https://wiki.ietf.org/group/ops/yang-security-guidelines>. >>>>>>>>> Please review and let us know if the text is acceptable. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> For example: >>>>>>>>> - Paragraph 3, the first 2 sentences are not from the template: >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> "Servers MUST verify that requesting clients are entitled to >>>>>>>>> access and manipulate a given bearer or AC. For example, a >>>>>>>>> given customer must not have access to bearers/ACs of other >>>>>>>>> customers." >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>> That is ok to add, while maintaining the rest of the statements from >>>>>>>> the template. >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> - This sentence is not present: >>>>>>>>> "There are no particularly sensitive RPC or action operations." >>>>>>>>> If it should be added, should it be at the end of the section? >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>> Yes, it should be added to the end of the section. >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> From the guidelines page: >>>>>>>>> If the data model contains any particularly sensitive RPC or >>>>>>>>> action operations, then those operations must be listed here, >>>>>>>>> along with an explanation of the associated specific >>>>>>>>> sensitivity or vulnerability concerns. Otherwise, state: >>>>>>>>> "There are no particularly sensitive RPC or action operations." >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> - The last two paragraphs (after the readable nodes section) >>>>>>>>> do not seem to be within a section of the template. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>> These two paragraphs can be moved to the beginning of the Security >>>>>>>> Considerations section before the statement that says “This section is >>>>>>>> modeled after the template …”, just to be clear that it is not part of >>>>>>>> the template. Alternatively, they could be moved into a sub-section. >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>> Thanks. >>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 14) <!--[rfced] "Step (3)" does not seem accurate here. Does >>>>>>>>> it refer to item 3 in the list of assumptions, i.e., "3. The >>>>>>>>> customer provisions the networking logic..."? If so, may it be >>>>>>>>> updated as follows? >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> * The Cloud Provider for the configuration per Step (3) above. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>>>> * The Cloud Provider for the configuration per item 3 above. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 15) <!--[rfced] We note that this text was indented. As it is >>>>>>>>> unclear to us why it was indented, we have removed the >>>>>>>>> indentation. Was the intent for this to be a "Note"? If yes, >>>>>>>>> would you like this text to be in an <aside> element, which is >>>>>>>>> defined as "a container for content that is semantically less >>>>>>>>> important or tangential to the content that surrounds it" >>>>>>>>> (https://authors.ietf.org/en/rfcxml-vocabulary#aside). >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> The module supports MD5 to basically accommodate the >>>>>>>>> installed BGP base (including by some Cloud Providers). Note >>>>>>>>> that MD5 suffers from the security weaknesses discussed in >>>>>>>>> Section 2 of [RFC6151] and Section 2.1 of [RFC6952]. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Perhaps: >>>>>>>>> | Note: The module supports MD5 to basically accommodate the >>>>>>>>> | installed BGP base (including by some Cloud Providers). >>>>>>>>> | Note that MD5 suffers from the security weaknesses >>>>>>>>> | discussed in Section 2 of [RFC6151] and Section 2.1 of [RFC6952]. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 16) <!--[rfced] To clarify the citation of >>>>>>>>> I-D.ietf-opsawg-ac-lxsm-lxnm-glue (RFC-to-be 9836), we have >>>>>>>>> added "AC Glue" preceding it. Please review and let us know if >>>>>>>>> further updates are needed. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Original: >>>>>>>>> In any case, the parent >>>>>>>>> AC is a stable identifier, which can be consumed as a >>>>>>>>> reference by end-to-end service models for VPN configuration >>>>>>>>> such as [I-D.ietf-opsawg-ac-lxsm-lxnm-glue], Slice Service >>>>>>>>> [I-D.ietf-teas-ietf-network-slice-nbi-yang], etc. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Current: >>>>>>>>> In any case, the parent >>>>>>>>> AC is a stable identifier, which can be consumed as a >>>>>>>>> reference by end-to-end service models for VPN configuration >>>>>>>>> such as AC Glue [RFC9836], Slice Service [NSSM], etc. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 17) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We updated artwork to sourcecode in >>>>>>>>> Sections 5.1, 5.2.1, 5.2.2.1, 5.2.4, 5.2.5, 5.2.5.1, 5.2.5.2, >>>>>>>>> 5.2.5.3, 5.2.5.3.1, 5.2.5.3.2, 5.2.5.3.3, 5.2.5.3.4, >>>>>>>>> 5.2.5.3.5, 5.2.5.3.6, 5.2.5.4, 5.2.5.5, and 5.2.5.6 and >>>>>>>>> Appendix B. Please review whether this is correct. We note >>>>>>>>> that a YANG tree diagram is typically held in a sourcecode element >>>>>>>>> (https://authors.ietf.org/en/rfcxml-vocabulary#sourcecode). >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> In addition, please review the "type" attribute of each >>>>>>>>> sourcecode element in the XML file to ensure correctness. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> The current list of preferred values for "type" is available >>>>>>>>> at <https://www.rfc-editor.org/rpc/wiki/doku.php?id=sourcecode-types>. >>>>>>>>> If the current list does not contain an applicable type, feel >>>>>>>>> free to suggest additions for consideration. Note that it is >>>>>>>>> also acceptable to leave the "type" attribute not set. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 18) <!--[rfced] Abbreviations >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> a) Both the expansion and the acronym for the following terms >>>>>>>>> are used throughout the document. Would you like to update to >>>>>>>>> using the expansion upon first usage and the acronym for the rest of >>>>>>>>> the document? >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> attachment circuit (AC) >>>>>>>>> Customer Edge (CE) >>>>>>>>> Layer 2 VPN (L2VPN) >>>>>>>>> Layer 3 VPN (L3VPN) >>>>>>>>> Service Function (SF) >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> b) FYI - We have added expansions for the following >>>>>>>>> abbreviations per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). >>>>>>>>> Please review each expansion in the document carefully to ensure >>>>>>>>> correctness. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Customer VLAN (CVLAN) >>>>>>>>> IP Address Management (IPAM) >>>>>>>>> Layer 2 VPN (L2VPN) >>>>>>>>> Layer 3 VPN (L3VPN) >>>>>>>>> Network Configuration Protocol (NETCONF) >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 19) <!-- [rfced] Terminology >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> a) Throughout the text, the following terminology appears to >>>>>>>>> be used inconsistently. Please review these occurrences and >>>>>>>>> let us know if/how they may be made consistent. >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> Network Slice Service vs. Slice Service vs. IETF Network Slice >>>>>>>>> Service >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> b) To reflect how "parent AC" is consistently lowercase, may >>>>>>>>> we update instances of "Child AC" to "child AC"? Note that >>>>>>>>> there is mixed usage throughout the document. >>>>>>>>> --> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> >>>>>>>>> 20) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" >>>>>>>>> portion of the online Style Guide >>>>>>>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_langua >>>>>>>>> ge> and let us know if any changes are needed. 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